Reviews for Come to Life
waltrluvr fanfiction chapter 1 . 6/22/2010
I absolutely LOVE your storyline (or at least what's there so far)...

Some (hopefully) constructive critisism? Some of your sentences seem to be run-ons. I always find re-reading everything outloud clears this right up.

Also, a few of your sentences have confusing verb tenses (though, this was more in the first chapter than the other two...).

Other than that, amazing! I like your characters (Eve seems to be so sweet) and the humour you put into their names (Adam and Eve... :D ). I can't wait to see what happens to Eve next!
Darcy Braiden chapter 2 . 6/20/2010
Hah, the end of this one's cute and I much look forward to seeing this budding romance blossom~