|Reviews for Otis' Daughter|
| Black Sparrow chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
You have such a breathtaking gift of words. Well done!
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/21/2010
"And that crane cranked silently." There's something so profound about the tone of this line-like a prison inmate is watching the walls erect around him.
"A jazz juggler." This reminded me of Chicago.
"I poured coins like milk." Excellent simile. This reminded me of a wealthy person only giving money around the Christmas holidays.
"Vanity." Thy name is woman! [Sorry, I couldn't help but change the Shakespearean line :P].
"The greyest of afternoons." Stunning.
"On a Sabbath of Vampirism." Ahah. Brilliant.
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 6/20/2010
Ooh, the imagery... how is one supposed to pick a favorite line...
'speaking to more the shuffle of her socks on the slack carpet then her voice' - I just thought this was both terribly adorable and sad at the same time. Really invokes the pain of loneliness.
'love less for the loveless' - More delicious wordplay, thank ye.
Loved it, loved it, loved it. There is beauty in just about anything you write.