|Reviews for Marcel in Dreamscapes|
| Black Sparrow chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
That was beautifully crafted. Great job, I loved it.
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/23/2010
"Willows pawing." Excellent verb choice.
"Learning to breathe symbiotically." A fascinating line.
"Howls billowing." Beautiful.
"God doesn't exist today." What a striking line. I found it rather hhonest, actually; not sad, just honest.
"Isolde stands nude." I know you like Isolde. This allusion works well here. :)
| in theory chapter 1 . 6/23/2010
There's something about breathing symbiotically that signifies a different kind of releationship. No longer just lovers, or friends... I found this a little slow-starting, it began for me with the line 'the way a song tastes after you get sick of it'. Mm so much to consider about that, and a lovely play on words too.
That penultimate stanza is fascinating, though I confess I am clueless about the Isolde and Marcel references. I forget history and classical things too quickly. Lesson learned, 'just to affirm that God doesn't exist today' is another ingenious line.
I feel a bit in limbo myself after reading this. Not a problem though, I quite enjoy the sensation.
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 6/23/2010
I really liked the last line about Isolde
'Isolde stands nude, skin cracking into veins in the corner of my dark room, pointing jealously -'
Not only is the image gorgeous but it actually ties in the whole story together. Beneath the soft gentle layers of city life, there is a woman in need of comfort and Marcel is her source.