That's so bad, i thought it was all over and she'd wake up in a hospital with layton waiting by her side, not in a van with brody. always with the cliffhangers but i love it and i need to know what happens next so get writing.

Dang! how did Brody get in the ambulance that ass hole. And Layton thinks that she would be okay. He doesn't even realize that he left her in bad position.

This was a great chapter, the best actually and the cliffhanger is just horrible. I wonder what you are thinking about for the next chapter because I can tell you that I am very excited to know more about what will happen to Ariel.

I love it when she tells Layton that she loves him. And the good part now is that we realize he isn't a kid. Nineteen year old is pretty good, and three years difference is not that much for a relationship.

Anyway please update, us fans are all waiting for more :D

this is bad... i hope layton will save ariel

Good chapter, oh, and, AW! THEY LOVE EACH OTHER! And now: NO! WHY! WHY THE CLIFFHANGER! UPDATE SOON! Or else...

-RoseBriar

Why do you keep doing this? Omg I hate you! she better be ok :'(

When you mentioned the paramedic you said "with a grotesque smile on her puckered lips" instead of his btw :)

UPDATE SOON!

Hi. First time commenter. I discovered your story and it's super awesome. Ariel sounds pretty cool and spiffy. I love her attitude, yet how she is still like a kid because of her age. Layton is just awesome and knows it. I like how because of Ariel, he is insecure. Princess is so soo cool and spiffy, with her know-it-all kind of way. I hope Ariel is fine from swimming. It makes me realize that I should learn how to swim, in case of an emergency. Gosh, Brody is crazy. It makes you realize that anyone can be like that. You don't even suspect Brody. Ariel and Layton makes such a cute couple. :)

i hope ariel will be fine.

Omfg! Y wouldn't the just take the gun and keep it pointed at him till help came?

Layton better save her! U know it's kinda ironic how her name is Ariel and she's afraid of water lol

Update update update!

OMG! I can't believe they got away! But I also can't believe you'd leave us with such an awful cliffhanger! :( WRITE AGAIN ASAP! I MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! - RoseBriar

You can't stop there! Thanks for updating, and please do so again, soon... I might die from the suspense!

Great job,

Eva

Whoa! This is AMAZING! I LOVED it! It totally flowed. Ususally, in a story with both romance and suspense, it turns kind of floppy and the characters loose their personality a bit but in this chapter, we actually learned a it more about them. I'm a bit confused about the part when Ariel "faked" the lust act but Brody said it was genuine...Wha?

yep, what can I say... I really liked the story

Kidnapped? I hope Ariel isn't kidnapped. That would be horrible. Not to say princess should get kidnapped either. oh the horror! I can't wait to see what happens.

Layton seriously almost reminds me of John Tucker from "John Tucker Must Die" movie. XD

I've read 5 chapters and I still think Layton's still an ass. :L I don't like him very much, unlike Ariel who I think is cute. xD

I'd like to apply for a BETA! :D Great chapter! I liked how it kind of shows more of Ariel's personality.