Your story is absolutely amazing!D

The ending was just perfect. There was no need for excess drama, just sweet moments. I have a feeling that Brody is making a comeback if there is a sequel. (I'm hoping there is, wink, wink.) Sad to see this story done though :'(

The beginning was a bit weird and freaky. I just loved the ending though because it had such good closure. Ariel and Layton are just perfect for each other in so many ways :]

This chapter went by really fast. First, it's trying to escape and then everyone's normal and back at school. Brody is just this sick, twisted guy who, like you mentioned before, stalked a six year-old. That is just so wrong and don't even start about the age difference.

I'm so happy that Ariel's pregnant with Layton's kid. Even though Brody couldn't have kids, it's still a possibility. I also liked knowing that he's nineteen instead of eighteen. It's just a year difference, but it seems less awkward.

Like I said, these are sick people... It just gives me goosebumps thinking that some people can be this disgusting.

How could there only be one paramedic there? Unless the police were part of the plot too, it seems so unlikely! I'm sad to say that there's only a few chapters left before this is done :(

Still no reason why Brody is a kidnapper, and I have a feeling it's just because he's sick. Who would have thought that a sweet guy like him could turn out to be such a prick.

I just knew somehow it was going to be Brody. The reason is why though. I have a feeling he heard Ariel's convo with Josie and did not like to be rebound guy. But that wouldn't explain why he's been kidnapping people...

I had this feeling that almost drowning was the reason for her phobia agaisnt water, but I thought it would be a family member. Just a bit different, but it would make more sense for the person who has the phobia to experience it.

Even though this chapter didn't start all lovey dovey, I like where it's going. This is really bad to say, but I like that there's a lockdown.

I take back what I said about Ariel not going back to Layton. She still wants him, she's just better at not showing it. I totally love Layton now because he admitted that he wants (loves) Ariel.

I'm sort of happy that Layton is the one thinking about Ariel instead of the other way around. Normally, it's the girl who wants the guy back. Cliché at times and they just make girls feel worse about themselves.

I like how Ariel is moving on, but not with Brody. To me he doesn't seem serious. Just want to get some.

I wish Ariel and Layton went back to their normal behaviour in the first chapter. It was much more enjoyable.

I feel like Ariel hurt Layton's feelings in the restaurant. Which makes Layton more likable, nothing better than sympathy.

I can't see a teacher at a club, no matter how old or young they are. It's just awkward, but if we met Ariel before we knew her as a teacher it would have been different.