|Reviews for Is There a Solution?|
| rockettwriter4 chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
i LOVED the prologue and the topic too it has so much more potential and I think u did a great job! there are a few things I found a bit cliche, like:
"The most wrong thing of all in the whole entire universe, is my little sister's disease." i found this a bit cliche and i feel that it would be better reworded.
"We were both playing in our totally awesome game room." i did not like this bit because it made it sound too much like a diary entry instead of a first person narration and they are similar but there is a BIG difference.
Lily kept dumping food on her face and in her hair." this line and the next two paragraphs i found very eccentric.
the rest i thought was great.
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