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lipleaf chapter 1 . 10/11/2010
I really like the way your lines blend into one another. They have a nice flow going and the addition of "I do" fits pretty well. I think it might feel a little more natural if you changed the ";" to "-", though. The second half of the poem was my favorite, definitely. "Nights under the streetlights glowing" is good imagery and rolls off my tongue. The ending was great. Nice job.
TheLovelessRose chapter 1 . 10/11/2010
I always wonder: is family really what keeps us together or is it the wall that seperates all of us?

I love this poem! Very strong :)