Reviews for Without Light
ShortcakeMattie chapter 24 . 6/27/2011
Aw. Poor Kintra. But everything makes much more sense now with the explanation of his eyes. You really capture his loneliness even though the chapter's through Heather's eyes. Well done.

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"Well yeah," She shrugged. "No one wants used goods.

Edit: "Well yeah," She shrugged. "No one wants used goods." - Unfortunately, that's so true to some people. :(

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Poor Heather too. This really is another heartbreaking chapter. You really capture the pain of falling in love with someone you can never have.

-Mattie
aureliasilver chapter 24 . 6/26/2011
Honestly, I do not generally read slash fiction. However, the fact that I read the whole story to this point in one sitting is a testament to how much I like your plot and the way you are developing your characters. I am somewhat confused about who I should be cheering for at this point. The only thing I have some degree of certainty of is that I dont think you are going to kill off Heather...but looks like everyone else is fair game. Cant wait to read your next chapter. P.S. I'm a little confused as to whether Selenia is dead or still alive...
Xmidnight.queenX chapter 18 . 6/26/2011
did mura mark heather? he didnt! grr i wanted kuro to mark her [

so kintra and kuro are bound to each other? so they are marked then right?

poor chris and estelle [ they are two and not one [ *tear

and did heathers birthday already pass? this is random but so kuro knows people that know how to write because they wrote the book for heather then again it is iegal so shouldnt kuro not have those connections?
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 15 . 6/26/2011
You described the unicorn part so well, I wish I could've actually been there! I thought it was so sweet that Heather is his treasure, I can't believe she didn't realize it right from the first time he touched her. I swear this book just gets better and better
Xmidnight.queenX chapter 17 . 6/25/2011
wow i think kuro is having an emotional overload i mean first he finds out heather was supposed find ruby weapon(kintra) and destroy i mean tell the allies to destroy it and then he has the fight with kintra and what was that kiss all about? are they not related or what? and the his treasure was threatened and he totally lost it! i mean he was just standing there but fuck he destroyed a bunch of crap and people or shiren etc that had nothing to do with it

and heather couldnt you tell that the dragon turned into kintra aka the ruby weapon and that is soooo cute and romantic that when she picked up the correct sex human doll it turned into her and it was exactly her not some fake bimbo hahhaha

and was with the store guy? seX marks the spot? hilarious but also like wtf and now i get it why estelle wante dot get marked but i didnt know you HAD to have sex to mark them
wildsong-dragonchild chapter 20 . 6/25/2011
Originally came across the link from this on deviantArt earlier today. Enjoyed reading the scene published there so moved over here to read the whole story. I love it. It really captured my imagination and is a truly original plotline, something not found often these days. I really hope you do get it published because I want a printed copy!

I really like the depth of character of Kintra and Kuro, and the relationship between the two of them. Also the way they interact with Estelle, Chris and Heather and their difference in attitude towards humans. I'd love to see a bit more dynamic between Heather and Chris though. Right now it sort of seems like Heather is letting Chris take care of her, which is not something I expected given the way she has acted in the past. I also wonder what each thinks about the relationships the other has formed, but I guess that's coming later in the story. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of it.
Xmidnight.queenX chapter 16 . 6/25/2011
no no no no omg fuck fuck fuck fuck grrr fuck grrr everything was going so well shesh man fuck and this is where kuro kills her because its his duty

fuck man she had finally found the weapon and fallen for him to a certain extent i mean for goodness sake

and i get the feeling akai is kuros mother

p.s. excuse my potty mouth but im feeling some strong emotions right now so that is the only way i feel i could try and do them justice but im just like ahhh! lol great awesome terrific story to the 100000000000000 power hahahaha

what can i say my nerdy side shows up when i get too excited lol
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 13 . 6/25/2011
Very shocking twist at the ending! It just keeps getting better and better!
Xmidnight.queenX chapter 15 . 6/25/2011
OMG OMG OMG! im squealing like a little girl! i knew it! that is why he is so protective of her and now he has to do something to keep her from dying and id heather is starting to like him too yay! but what about mura? doesnt he like her too or something like that? and has heather been reincarnated or something? cause i got that impression based on what aki and lucas and cero were talking about back in the days i mean chapters lol

and how cute! he made her a ring and it is on her left ring finger aka married which equal the same as belonging to him D im just so happy what am i saying not happy im ecstatic!

so kira pretends to be gay because he loves the queen on wolves and she loves him

and whats with all this cross breeding? doesnt that mess up the offspring like that half wolf half dragon that took the crystal?

i cant help but still feel bad for estelle poor little pet doesnt know what the hell is going on with his emotions
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 12 . 6/25/2011
I don't care if he's supposed to be evil, or the Ruby Weapon or anything. I officially love Kuroshi. The beginning of this chapter where he tries to take care of her (especially the bit about 3 meals a day) literally had me laughing. I'm glad you put some humor in here :)
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 11 . 6/24/2011
I really like how you showed both what Heather and Kuroshi were thinking when he was trying to kill her.
Xmidnight.queenX chapter 14 . 6/24/2011
so kuro needs to fins a wife humm how about a human ] *wink wink

i think heather is kuros treasure or he should be ]

so estelle is a boy man iwas thinking and trying to imagine him while i was work at today and there where no customers

if heather liked to be touched that whole licking to take the blood off thing would have turned out to be some like hot make out session but i think this way was better because now he has to make her like being touched and that was a challenge hehehe ;]

i wonder what was the kings treasure and i wonder if that is why he became such a grouch because he lost it

and whats with the visions? i dont get them are they from the past or the present or what the hell is going on with them?
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 10 . 6/24/2011
I really hope Maura sticks with Heather, since Chris wont be around. Well I hope that isn't true but it seems that way right now.
SocraticPrince chapter 1 . 6/24/2011
Weeeeeeell I love it so far. D It really catches the readers attention with the short backstory and then moving straight into the main story. I'm excited to read the next chapter. ) I already feel some anxiety for the main character. Very nice. )
TheHeartBreakKid1324 chapter 9 . 6/23/2011
I really hope Christian ends up with Heather. It makes me want to skip to the ending xD I'm a sucker for romance. I'm confused about why writing and reading is so bad though. I don't understand the harm in it
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