go finish the story D: so i can read the rest, it was good

It was really good, it had me wanting more from the writer

At the end of this chapter the author says (in her note to the reader) that some big things are going to happen very fast; I believe she will keep her word. This chapter moves very quickly, and leaves the reader curious for more.

The author's style of writing helps to create a bland atmosphere for the town in which Heather inhabits; however, this style also creates an energetic atmosphere when towards the end of the chapter - when the story begins to shift into the plot. Simply put the writer is able to create an atmosphere that can match the moods and emotions of her characters, and the settings in her story. I look forward to the next installment.

Well I must say as far as first chapters go this is very much an introduction. There are a few inconsistencies, but no real mistakes. In all it was a very pleasant read (considering I am coming down from reading some extremely depressing novels).

The first chapter is always the most difficult to write; it is a matter of finding a starting point that one can feel comfortable with. In any case, the author has done a very good job of breaking the ground, and any reader can tell that she fells very comfortable with her writing and this chapter.

Intersting way of writing, I liked the way you derscribed the setting.