|Reviews for Bloodstained Noble|
| Tragedy of Light and Dark chapter 2 . 8/28/2010
This is a really good chapter! I love how your story starts out so casual and I love the fact that Yaris is such a dual character. He has this weird personality about him and he's very mysterious. I wonder who will be the next person on his list of conspirators.
| Lime-sama chapter 2 . 8/28/2010
I like Rosillia. She's very smart and really observant. I wonder what will happen with her and prince? Will she want to solve his mystery? Will she catch him being Jack the Ripper?
| Black Bride Anna chapter 2 . 8/28/2010
Wow...Just wow! I was absolutely blown away by your detail here. This chapter was great and I love the way the murder went down. Yaris is a very interesting and quirky guy. I love to try and get inside of his head. I look forward to your newest chapter!
| Dark Kurogane chapter 2 . 8/27/2010
Very descriptive. You have me hooked on this story. I can't wait for the next chapter and I'm really interested in Rosillia's character. I wonder what event makes her life so horrid and what role Rutherford B. Hayes has in all of this.
| Iruka-sama chapter 2 . 8/27/2010
This chapter had me on edge with every word! I really liked how the murder planned out and how intelligent Yaris is. It's nice to see a villain who is actually smart.
| Schnyder chapter 2 . 8/20/2010
Both the prologue and the first chapter had their chilling moments. Yaris is a twisted character; his off-kilter behavior is the crux of the atmosphere you create in the story.
Unfortunately, the scenes where Yaris is missing have lesser impact. The story has many typos and grammar errors, which stand out when there's build up and the pace slows down. Your sentences are descriptive and vivid, but this also causes an erratic flow in your words. Strong vocabulary is nice, but when it descends to ramblings, it knocks the story off balance.
Many times, over description becomes your weak point as it usually repeats what's already happened (or known) or tries to stuff too much into one line. Your run-ons sacrifice tension and mood for trying to supply the reader with information.
Plotwise, the whole murder went over well, building up suspense and bringing out a satisfying climax. The only thing that bothered me on that part was Rosillia's suspicion of Yaris. It came a little too quickly and with the smallest bit of evidence.
Overall, the plotting was done well and the atmosphere you created keeps the reader going. However, it is a bumpy ride.
| xRayne wolfx chapter 2 . 8/17/2010
I like how you got this plot in a horror like fantasy. Your characters are like from the olden times.. I hope to read more in the future, good luck in college
| Julia Lucrezia Hanazono chapter 2 . 8/17/2010
Wow! I seriously love how you wrote about that big fancy social party and such! You certainly do your research! You're so much better at that than me! I can't even do that much! I do kinda wish I could be as eloquent and descriptive as you. Maybe I should ask for advice later on. When it comes to adult matters and dialogue, I'm absolutely horrid. This is very good indeed! I really like the name Rosillia. Did you come up with that yourself? And isn't Rutherford B. Hayes one of the U.S. presidents? Oh! I did find one error though. One of the women says "Haven't you heard about the latest strong of murders?", it should actually be "string" of murders. But that's okay! Just a simple error. I can't believe Yaris killed Lafayette! I pretty much know nothing about this Jack The Ripper person (the only place I heard about him is from the anime Kuroshitsuji, even though I don't watch the anime or read the manga). I can't wait for more! This is great! By the way, I updated Oria of Araceli and Snow Princess (I don't think you've read this one). Awesome job as always!
| thisaccounthasbeenlefttowither chapter 1 . 8/12/2010
Oh, a story about a crazy noble murderer. I DO like my murderers. I'll keep an eye on this story, see how it turns out...
| Silencia chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
Brilliant start to an interesting story! I seriously saw the scene before me, like a movie! X3 I'm looking forward to updates!
| Dark Angel Hiroshima chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Good job so far!
| Tragedy of Light and Dark chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Awesome story! I can't wait to read chapter one!
| Jive Heron the Axis Tripper chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Perfect, absolutely perfect! I love stories like this, about the darker side of nobility!
| Black Bride Anna chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
I love dark stories and this one really looks promising. I'd love to see the first chapter.
| Lime-sama chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Very dark and beautifully written! I love it so far!