Reviews for Commanders |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Over all a good story. My only thing is that I'm not really into all that bondage, dom, threesome type stuff. So I just thumbed through those parts. But beyond that, over all it was a fun, and sweet story. |
![]() ![]() I loved this story and can not weight to read more of your mums work its so good |
![]() ![]() Great hentai, Twylla is a good girl |
![]() ![]() Amazing story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi, I noticed in some of these stories that there are a few punctuation corrections that could make it easier to read. I absolutely loved your mum's stories but it was sometimes hard for me to read with so many "..." In the paragraphs. I'm really good at editing stories and I'd be happy to look over everything. I look forward to more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a wonderful story please keep up the great work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Exelent! I loved this story and from my personal exeriance (roll playing online), I can sympathise with our lovely Twalley. I know how it is to be pulled in many directions. Exlent story. |
![]() ![]() Well, with creeps like Brinn around, no wonder dildos are so popular. I get a definate pedophile vibe from his need to infantalise those he satisfys himself on. A self-important, bullying, bisexual closet pedophile... that's really a turn on for some people? Talk about 'dumbinated'. Chapter 12 made me want to puke. Truly sickening stuff. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope you think about publishing this. Its great ;) |
![]() ![]() This story is really good! Your mother should really see it published. There are a few misspelled words, nothing an editing couldnt take care of, though. : ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() liiiike |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have written reviews for Commanders before but I just wanted to repeat that I LOVE THIS STORY! I have read it 5 times or more and it only gets better and better :) I really don't understand how it only has 108 reviews... it deserves way more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, that is an amazing story! Really amazing. And it could easily be published in my humble opinion. *sight* Just make sure to change the planet name (Cardassia), it is from Star Trek and it was a little disconcerting for me due to the fact, that Cardassians to my knowledge are gray and scaly skinned and have ridges over their eyes and are black haired. Well, I had the thought, that maybe a Trekki named the planet, when it was discovered? :) Well, will now check out the other stories your mom wrote. *off she runs* |
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![]() ![]() ![]() this story is amazingly good, onto another one you've posted i go! |