Nice sequel. I myself know someone who acts much like Nicole did most of this story. I'm referring to her blind pursuit of what she thought was best for Dane. Anyway, I merely say that because she almost seems unbelievable if you have never met someone like that. The severe emotional issues Dane exhibits feel right for someone who suffered extreme emotional and physical trauma. I'm glad you don't make it all sunshine, puppies, and rainbows.

great story I hope to see first degree burns up sometime soon very soon

Such an awesome story! I hope you keep writing!

Hmm...I actually finished this awhile ago, but I guess I never got onto giving a 'final review'. Overall enjoyable, but I do feel it dragged on a bit longer than it needed to, but that may just be my extended annoyance at the main characters.

Talent!

Good Afternoon, or Morning, or Evening or whichever it may be when you read this.

I'll start to say that it's quite the interesting story you have there. I could, but decided I won't review both your stories now when I read them both. It's much easier to write them together. I'll start off to say that the plot is quite nice and intriguing. Dane is one hell of a character and though I've read all this of here, I still wish to learn more about her. Nicole in her own right is interesting but by far a less complex person. I think it's quite beautiful how their relationship, romantically or friendly works out. You've managed to give them two distinct personalities yet meshed them quite well when they're together. Manly manages to have their character's behaviour or opinions change when they interact with each other.

I'm going to start with the story as it begins. When I read Dane walking around with her bad leg and rusty old bicycle I thought this story would be something else. I must admit that the change from her POV to Nicole's was a bit confusing and even back to Dane. It however was solved later on when it became clear that Dane would live with Nicole, if only as a flat mate or as a lodger. I do however love their first meeting. It's somehow already there tell one or two things about the three characters introduced yet; Dane is and can be very polite and helpful when given the chance without risking get the crap for it. Nicole is genuinely a kind person who rather put herself out there for a while so another human being can have at least a descent meal. And then of course Tyler, though he seem to be an ass perfectly on his own, I cannot to help that with the upbringing Dane got and how her family treated her, Tyler took after that as a second nature. Especially since he seemed so "cosy" with Dane's father. Either way I rather like the first interaction between them all. It gives us a ground to stand on how things really are, and who they may be, but not enough to predict things from there on.

I am a bit surprised how incredible easily Nicole and Dane seemed to get along at first, even if they both meant well. That's of course until I realised that their conversations never touched deeper and darker water, which they did quite often in this part of the story. I think the contrast between the chapter shows how problem can be brought up in new couples. Things can seem fine and dandy at first but problems will show up eventually. I rather love the way Nicole just keep prying and pushing Dane. Not because I want to see anyone hurt. But because much liked mentioned by Mina who seem like a bright gal, Nicole was used to the perfect and cuddling family, why can't others? Dane's reaction was much well deserved to them all throughout the whole story. She has been the subject of abuse in so many levels since the day she was born. Why should she seek them out now then? It both angers me and has me intrigued how they constantly treat her whenever she visits. The only one who actually to seem to hold a "proper" (which it's not) grudge against her is her father, the rest just seem to tag along. It does however sadden me to see someone so good be wasted because she is or was in no way loved.

Her relationship with her mother was the one that had me most interested though. Like said, they never talked, and the woman never acknowledged her youngest. So I feel, much like they both do, that the connection between them is there, somewhere. But whether it can become a real bond of any sort is unclear. I'd love to see a third part, concluding part to this story where things comes to some sort of agreement. Between Dane and Kate, and her family. And between Dane's family and herself. Where it was left off, it appears Kate might not hate the girl completely. And Christine and Adam seem to make some sort of effort. I'd like to see a "proper" ending to this. Not only to that but also Dane's career, whatever that would be.

Over all you have a great story here and I will definitely go on and see what other stories you have there. I do recommend you to keep writing regardless.

Your story is great, I have however every once in a while stumbled across grammar mistakes and some wording that has appeared as odd to me. I cannot point out anything now directly but I would in general just go over things one or twice more in the future, or even have a nit-picker to look at it. I also notice that at times conversations can be very much the same throughout the story. Not quite as much in this sequel, but the first did have a lot of repeating of happening and while some might not notice, some can find it a bit boring when things just seem to be the same. I think that the dynamic that is makes up for that a lot. I do notice more than often that surrounding description is "lacking" which can be good to add a bit more at times. Just to get an even stronger atmosphere of the scene.

All right. I'll be quiet now. I'm sure there's heaps more I originally intended to write but now forgotten. But ah well. I got to write something at least!

Like I said, I do recommend you to keep writing, you have a great sense of story and how to build and complete it.

/Kajskk

Wow this story was intense, there are a lot of feelings throughout the chapters. You really are something, you write so damn well!

The Wolfe family got on my nerves, they are the worst family ever.

As I said in another review I really like Nicole and Dane they are awesome! _ Thx for these kind of tender stories.

This one rivals my love of Celestial Reigns, which is saying a lot. I didn't think that the Wolfe family would be such a huge part of this story, but am glad that they were. It was very insightful to Dane's past and how she turned out in life before meeting Nicole. They each grew a lot in this story, Dane trying to deal with everything that her family did to her and Nicole learning to be supportive without being pushy. Compromise, a necessity in any relationship. I really think you have a knack for creating believable relationships and the conflicts that occur within them.

As always, thank you so very much for writing and I really hope to see these two again in another of your fantastic writings. Whatever you decide to write next, just continue writing, please.

Quick thought. This chapter makes me feel so guilty that I haven't donated blood in like four years. I feel like I should go out and find a blood drive right away.

Yo Starving, another great story, just like the first one, it was an emotional story, and with good scenes, if you know what I mean about scenes. So, just like the first one, I'll give it a 10/10, since they haven't put a rating system or something. Also, I would put a seal of approval, but I can't, anyways, I hope to see these 2 again and hope to read more of your stories, I wish you good luck, and until next time.

Thank you for writing such a wonderful story.

You are truly talented.

Engaging and meaningful.

Your stories are full of life, that's a very hard skill to master.

Keep writing. I enjoyed this immensely.

Loved this sequal, although is was annoying with Nicole fousing Dane's family onto her!

Read on your profile that you'll do a third story of Dane and Nicole. Can't wait for it to come!

Wonderful story! Great character development and evolution - even though I was getting rather frustrated at Nicole's linear mindset which finally drove Danny to full disclosure. Wow! Your denouement wrapped up the immediate story/plot lines while still preserving a little mystery regarding Danny's relatives.

I look forward to your future stories (especially next adventure featuring Danny and Nicole!) Thank you!

A puppy, birthday, and happy bed fun. Great way to end a story :D

Greetings Captain!

Oh 'tis so lovely that they survived. I knew they would of course, but I still wanted to know how. Though I wish it had ended with Dane's proposal, seeing as then the next one could focus entirely on the wedding, but this mighty close. I eagerly await the next installment in the series Captain!