Reviews for Chapters
improv chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
“The light formed puddles on the sidewalk and crowded into empty plant pots.” is my favourite line out of this.

The only mistake I think I could find, which you probably have already noticed, would be “He watched them as she blank, her eyelashes intertwining like a closing Venus Fly Trap.” where I think “blank” should be “blinked”.

I freakin’ love these chapters. Nice how you’ve kept the dialogue moving with the description. At no point did it slow down or drift off.

The part with Sophie as Medusa and being unable to look at her directly in the face, was really well done. Extremely sad, but good.