Reviews for Dominantly Submissive |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Please update |
![]() ![]() ![]() love it ! update soon x |
![]() ![]() ![]() So. If you're ever going to continue this story, I would ask of you this one thing: Do NOT make her fall in love with him. He's a creep. All that possessive crap annoys the hell out of me. Cute? Likely story. I want her to win. Also, he has no idea what love is. He knows what lust is at the moment, but not love. "If you love something, let it go...if it doesn't come back to you, it was never yours to have" (paraphrasing slightly) is an expression that these male cliches (/idiots) all seems to forget. Love wants what's best for the other person, and isn't obsessively selfish. Rant done. I love her character, she's awesome :) I hope you don't turn her into some slushy idiot - because that is SUCH a cliche. Anyway, good job so far. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I definitely have to say that I hope you arent abandoning this story! Love it, pleaseeeeee update again soon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just found your story and wanted to say that I am really enjoying it! I love how Victoria is strong and independent! It makes for an interesting mating experience, that's for sure! I think it's so funny how Ulrich really doesn't seem to understand why she is fighting his attempts. Anyways, I do think that switching POV's from sentence to sentence is a tad confusing. It might be easier to keep up if it was either done by chapter or atleast broken up into scenes. Other than that, great job! Can't wait to read more! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hiya! I think this is super interesting-I cannot wait to see how their relationship develops. Truthfully, I was a bit put off about how he had literally just been complaining about the chick trying to mate him and how he would only mate with his true mate, went out on a run, and conveniently found her. It seems a bit... off to me. Though I do understand that it helps his characterization out a lot in that a true mate means a lot to him which is why he is fighting so hard for Victoria. :) Anyway, good job, |
![]() ![]() I think that you have an interesting idea for a story, but you could improve upon the writing. It is sometimes difficult to follow whose perspective we were viewing from, especially when it seemed to change within the chapter. A good way to fix this would be for you to focus on one character throughout the whole story or to write it scene by scene. I assure you, it would be a much more enjoyable read this way. |
![]() ![]() ![]() thisstory isso good please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Angelica, Liar liar pants on fire! Update Soon (When you get back from vacation) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha Angelica, of all things xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like this story and you should update.i can't wait till the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uh Oh Victoria is starting to have some feelings for Ulrich. I can't wait til she explores the good points in being with him. OH poor Ulrich is really in love with her. I can't wait to see what happens when he finds out her real name. LOL |
![]() ![]() ![]() How funny. I love the way you made Victioria. Love her. lol. Can't wait for an update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! What did Ulrich mean 'She's my new mate, She will be your new alpha female?' Does, that mean, he had a mate before or something? Anyways, love this story! |