This story is so good (the entire series rather) that I've been sneaking chunks of time in my classes to read it!:) and I don't use my phone during class at all... I just couldn't get enough!

I love yor characters because they're so real and not cliche! I love piracy and the history on pirates. I'm obsessed with it and some novels that throw in the cliche romance stuff annoys me greatly! You're really one of my inspirations!:)

Amazing job and can't wait to read more!:)

-DE-

Probably one of the best written stories I've read on here! Sorry for being so late on the update, I've been so captivatd by this and the last two books that I didn't set aside time to review!:p

But, I see now as a convenient time! And I won't be one to rush you! I know what rushing to meet demands does to a writer...trust me...great writers need time and you certainly are one! Amazing job!:)

All in all, great story, amazing characters, wonderful suspense and thrill! And the bits of Romance are always appreciated!:)

Peace and Love

~marie

Great Story! I can't wait to read the next chapter! :)

that's it? NOOOO!

Exactly how long is it from this summer's end?

please write agian soon, this is one of my favourite series and i wait with great impatience for the next chapter.

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whoa dragon alert. that was a pretty gripping chapter but i gotta admit that i was a little sad in not having the closure of the last chapter not involve our favorite characters :(

AND YOU'RE GONNA BE GONE FOR HOW LONG?

so cruel. oh so so cruel.

bah humbug im so impatient. do hurry up

Well, now that this chapter was pretty sweet, I didn't think it should be in the novel. I think this one should be in your collection of short stories. Yes it has something to do with the story, it really doesn't have anything to do with Roger or Em's adventure and that's what this novel seems to be about. So, though this chapter was really well written, has a lot of description, and very well done on the dialog, I really don't think it should be in the novel.

Aw, so sad that it's the last chapter for so long. :'( I seriously love this story and these characters. I really like how you did this chapter by jumping into a whole other perspective with this family and introducing/focusing on the conflict with Tarym. Nicely done. Now I just hope November gets here fast because I can't wait to read more. Good luck with everything!

Woah, is this a new element to the story? Confused me for a while, but looks good! Is this linked to Draconus?

Now, how do you kill a dragon D: Oh dear.

Sad day. It's the last chapter of the summer, and it's a short one. This is a solemn occasion.

Interesting choice to return to Tarym at this point in the story. I like it. I agree with your timing, because I think this is a good opportunity to remind readers of the greater scope of the story. And Robin and Em's storyline is at an important crossroads, as well. All in all, I like what you're doing.

"It started from the Hammerhead Lakes region and snaked its way through the heart of former Baron Eleusis's land and through Baron Odina's..."

Maybe think about saying "the heart of the former Baron Eleusis's..." It sounds better in my head, but I can't speak to a hard-fast rule that governs this sort of situation.

"she asked in a squeaky voice that was hers."

The last bit of this sentence is just sort of weird for me. Of course, we know it's her voice because she asked it. It feels redundant.

It's the dragon again! I wonder if this is the spawn of that egg that Em lost back in the last book... I really do like this little interlude. Beyond its purpose in the structure of the overall story, I think you introduce some important facts about the state of things (did I read that rattlesnakes are falling from the sky?) And I'm a bit fond of this little family. Not to mention that there is perhaps some hope that we may have a reappearance from our good friend Leo soon. :)

No update till November. That's going to be a long time. Maybe you can sneak in an update around Labor Day or something, lol. Anyways, good job on the chapter, and I hope that you update soon!

I personally thought that her escape was the best part of the hole chapter. I've seen that escape in a couple movies (DO NOT ask me which ones they were, I could not remember their names even if my life depended on it) and you had it written down so well that it sounded better than those visuals in the movies. This chapter was one of your better ones. Keep up the good work.

Ooh, nice cliffy once again. I like this concept with the magical image of the ground swallowing her... I noticed it before too and now I see there's a reason for it. I assume it has something to do with the trident or maybe this happens only when she holds it? I really like it though. And I'm glad she was able to escape and find her way back, only to face another obstacle the moment she thought she was safe again. Poor Em, but that's what happens on an adventure... there's hardly ever time to rest. As always, beautiful work. I hate that the next chapter is the last of the summer but I'm still excited to read it. Update soon!

god i hope thats the end of black freakin death.

aw maannnn...last chapter? say it aint sooo.

this chapter felt very short...or maybe cuz i read it too fast. eh wuteva cant wait for next weeekkk

"Tearing her eyes away from the trident, Em watched Black Death Mewbaran straightened up."

This should be "straighten up" or "as Black Death Mewbaran straigtened up."

She's standing in front of her mother's killer? Oh man. Em totally needs to beat the life out of him after that. I hope Em gets the honor...

Just FYI, factitious does not mean "broken into factions." It means artificial or insincere. If that is not the meaning you intended, you may want to switch it out.

Woo! I love Em. We haven't seen her solo like this in a while, and it's refreshing to see her kicking butts and taking names again. She doesn't need a man! And I love her rage and her thirst for revenge. I thought the fire was a nice retaliation.

To answer your concern, I thought the chapter was believable. No worries. I thought the blue bed sheet was clever, too. And I'm glad that Dread Robins is okay, too. Good stuff.

I'm looking forward to your next update (though I'm sad that they won't be as frequent after the next one.) Anyways, good work as always, and update soon!

I think it's a fine balance of fantastic action! I like the ending touch of the burning - it just doesn't make sense for Em to go without taking her revenge!

Poor Louise. Her nerves must have been frayed from all the worrying. At least she has someone *cough* to take care of her and keep her from becoming too lonesome, eh.

When you said "the deck rose up to catch her" I'm assuming magically? Because when Em and Robbin escaped Atlantis you used "the sand rose" to capture Robbin or whatever and it seemed as if that was a figure of speech. Or was that both figures of speech. O.o/ Cool. I liked getting something right!I hope Robbin gets more gentle. I know he isn't like that and Em just ignores and accepts, but I still figure she would be emotionally hurt with how little he outwardly expresses his concern. I mean, she is unconscious most of the time he's freakin' out over her. I mean, that's why he's freakin' out. LOL. Maybe you could make it a conflict. Him getting guilty? Remember the mermaid's tear, blood, virgin and all? I don't think he apologized enough. But hey! It could also just be their dynamic, I mean no one's absolutely perfect? DAYUM. I want to have more of Robbin's inside thoughts if you need something to write about. I don't know how that's going to happen but it would be awesome! Keep writing!