I'm interested!

You're GOOD!

I'm very interested in seeing this story continued. Hope you'll consider it.

This definitely could be an awesome story! I would love to read it! :)

you should make this a real story

I would like to see it to continue! He said he's not going to hurt her so...what is he planning to do and what on earth was he doing there at the best time?

I guess you should. It sounds good so far and I am curious on what happens in the future of the story

ohh sounds like that would b an interesting story. if u have the time i think u should make it into a story. i think ur writing is great n that u can do it.

take care keep writing _

Ah! Please please please make it into a full story. Great plot going on there. :)

I once had a dream where I knew I was going to die, but I too woke up before I was killed. It was very strange, and had something to do with my lover (who doesn't exist in real life) for some reason wanting me dead. All the people I thought were my friends were in on it too. My subconscious mind is a mystery to me.

Maybe I'll write a story based on mine someday.

I know I would definitely like to know more about where the characters started out, how they came to this point, and what happens next.

Shade

I like the idea of the story. It could be very eerie and turn out really great. However, I wish that you didn't start the story smack-dab in the middle of where the girl meets the serial killer. Now that we're just thrust right into it, it kind of kills the excitement. You could have showed us where she was before the snowy forest, WHY she was stranded, HOW her leg got broken - things like that, before introducing the serial killer into it. Or, better yet (this is just me ranting)put a little perspective on the serial killer first. How did HE get in the mountains? The reader would want to know these things - or at least, I would.

But, I did like the way you wrote it nonetheless. It was crisp and straight-forward, I like that. Although in the first paragraph, I think you gave away too much details about the situation. I personally think you should have eased the reader into it, giving the details in a more inconspicuous way, than just kind of listing them like you did here.

But by all means, I think you should keep on writing this :) show us a little more about the characters, how she got where she is, how HE is where HE is, and ect. etct. Good job, Happy writing!

I like this a lot, I would read it if you made this into a longer story :)

Maralie