Ooee. I’m guessing the unknown POV is Kevin’s. Mm… I’m probably gonna spout some stuff that you already know since you say your filler isn’t that good. The main thing is it has no focus. You kinda jumped here there and everywhere without elaboration. If you were to edit this story for print publishing, this isn’t a very good way to go about introducing new characters and whatnot. You ought to split this filler into a few chapter intros. With the elaboration in the chapters. Then at the end everything kinda comes together. Yeap. Stay strong with your family yeah.

I actually like the build up of tension a little, def expecting some drama in the next chapter though!(: update soon!

This was really good and I hope that your family crisis gets better whatever it may be.

I love the update!

It was amazing!

If that bitch was my sister I'd have put a fork in her eye.

Please update soon!

Have a good week!

-ifly*hugs*

Loved it, update soon!

It seriously wouldn't surprise me if he was an athiest. It just...fits. And his name is Christian which is hilarious, so yeah.

I liked it. A lot. :)

~Stella

ok i love this story so much! i can't wait to read more! its ok that you haven't updated in a while. family problems are more impotent then a story. i hope everything works out though! just remember everything happens for a reason!

Love it so much! Her sister sounds very strange looking.

ahahahaha, i LOVED the barracuda part!

She doesn't seem so bad now, i feel bad that she's pregnant but it's a great realistic twist to it though(:

I agree though, Jace is truly corrupting Mera but in a good way;P

Friggin awesome chapter, update soon!:)

I think this story is fabulous. The only thing that really annoys me is in the early chapters where you say he licked his lips, she licked her lips- it was just in there so many times that it really distracted me from the purpose of the conversation at hand. If you want them both to lick their lips phrase it differently - she wet her chapped lips with her tongue, she was so nervous she had to trace her tongue over her cracked lips, work the action into the sentence so it fits in with the story instead of just plotting it in there. It's a minor issue but it just brings your story down because of the overuse of the phrase. Other than that, it's great! Can't wait for the next chapter!

By the way, I hope you continue that story that you put the first chapter of in here, I thought it was brilliant!

Oh! Only can review once per chapter so I’m reviewing a previous one. I like your twist with Susy’s pregnancy. I think your characters are quite real and aren’t flat despite the cliché pairing. Keep writing! I’ll be waiting for your chapters!

Really loving this story! Gosh I just love the whole bad boy-good girl cliché pairing! And… gosh, is Christian gonna turn out to be gay? He sure seems to be!

I love Christian :)

Jace is pretty nifty.

Mera seems nice.

Susy irritates me... but I'm probably being judgemental or something. Am I? Ah... whatever. ANYWAYS.

I really like your plot. Unlike many of my stories, yours is actually a PLOT. There are little things, grammar-wise that I noticed throughout but that's pretty minor. Just proofread a bit more and they'd be gone.

Right. Well. You should, y'know, update. It'd be pretty flippin' awesome. Because having an unrequited obsession for a story is, y'know... painful. High school's pretty busy though, so I guess fictionpress isn't as big a priority.

Peace, love, and Jace-filled objects,

SAMMY

SO GOOD !

What's next ?

I love Jace

And I would Love to see Mera and Suzy getting friends even though it seems to be only for Suzy's sake, and I would hate her if she was to separate Mera and Jace !

I want to know what will be our little Mera's next adventures XD

Hi! My FP was convinced that I'd already reviewed the last chapter so I couldn't review. *sobs* But model 2010 AT YOUR SERVICE!

I love Jace and Christian. They are the strangest pair. Although, I'd find it ironic if Christian was an athiest because of his past. (Get it?)

I'm tired, so I'm all ADD and I won't help. So, good chapter. It was awesome. :)

~Stella