Reviews for Untitled
MagicWords chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
This sounds rather intriguing. Be on the look out for a few spelling mistakes. But other than that, it looks interesting!

Heather N.S chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
wow that was very interesting! Just a few things, in the beginning when you describe the smell, you forgot the "t" at the end of "wet".

In the second paragraph at the beginning after the word "whirring" you have two commas.

In the first line of the fifth paragraph when you're describing the alien, you use the word "thing", your writing is so much better than that! If you find your self resorting to using words like "thing" or "stuff" to describe something, go grab a thesaurus! :)

Otherwise I really liked this bit, once again, great job! :)