|Reviews for Trying to Be Manly|
| OttBallOut chapter 1 . 8/21/2010
A cute story. However the level of maturity and manner of speaking is a little distracting, especially when compared next to his parents.
This could be expanded to include when he was hurt the day before, and then end where you've left it.
I love the name Calvin! The only problem (and it's my prob not yours ;] ) is that I picture him with a stuffed orange tiger next to him (true, he's only 6 in the comics).
The OttBall - Out
| Heather N.S chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
I really like how you started this story, I couldn't tell what age he was, honestly I was expecting an older teenager! I love how his maturity in the beginning was almost snobbish, but very mature and by the end of the story he was just like any other little eight year old boy, scared of the bully but finding comfort in his parents. Really well done! The only thing I can find to be fixed is the following:
"You should of told us!"
"You should have told us!"
Great job! :)