Reviews for The Secret of Youth |
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![]() ![]() ![]() *Blinks* Not entirely what I was expecting when clicking on the story. I'm pleasantly surprised. The slap stick comedy in the beginning was fantastic when Jake and Michael came out to her. My eyes popped open and my mouth dropped. It was perfect! You had me guessing what the supernatural aspect would be and I didn't expect vampires at all. To be honest you could have made them anything, like incubi, which would have been way more creative, and would have definitely put this story in a higher category, but vampires worked regardless. The sex scene that was in it was raunchy and great. Some authors can cross the line between raunchy (good) and nasty (bad), for the way you wrote the story, just the general atmosphere in its entirety, made the scenes feel spot on. The characterization of Jake, Michael, and even the Doc helped this out. A few more descriptive words thrown in here and there it would be fantastic, however I settled on a ‘great’ rating. You did an amazing job and I'd like to thank you for taking the time to write. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very interesting, I believe if you wanted to continue this could become a very good story. Nice work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A very well written piece. I would like to see a sequal with more, but we shall see. All in all it is good as a stand alone. I'm just a sucker for sequals. DLB |
![]() ![]() ![]() The sweetness that you've put in with the raw sexual tension just makes the whole story all the better. I loved it and the supernatural twist at the end just made me go YAY so glad they'll be together forever. JM |