|Reviews for God|
| HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 8/23/2010
This was another interesting piece, and the stanza at the end really made me think about my own faith. The answer you've given is probably true of a lot of people, and you've got a good mix of relatableness and non-relatableness here.
One problem I found, "What were my beliefs?
concrete or abstract?" - I feel there would be more power and emersion into the poem if you wrote in present tense, and you are having the thoughts in the present tense, even if the scene isn't.
| Mini-Kyo chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
I like this one. :) It's very sincere, and makes more sense than most in this category. (Lol) And -finally- who someone knows how to spell or use spellcheck. XP Bitchery aside, I like it. (And I love the penname, by the bye.)