ok, so you want a review?

Loved, loved, loved the story! And just so you know, I believe if you decided to continue, it would be an amazing story!

Also, you wanted to know about 'any mistakes.' Well there was was a teeny tiny error in part 3 where you used the word feeling-I think it would have sounded better if there was an s tacked on the end. I can't tell you exactly where it was, just that in the sentence which it was used-it was the 2nd or 3rd word.

There was also a misuse of a word in the middle of part 4. You used the word 'wine' and it should have been the word 'whine'. Again, not exactly a 'biggie' in the grammatical dept., but you did say that you wanted to know.

I'll be lokking forward to more writing from you in the future.

"If you think of 'lemons' and associate it with fruit that grows on trees, then you shouldn't read this..." Hahaha that made me laugh out loud :) This story was awesome. You should definitely continue :D

Um...Wow! Nice work with the scene description! I could almost see the fall foliage, the clearing and the pond/lake. Hope to see an update soon. I'd like to see where you take this.

Good first chapter, you got me interested in the story. its hard to critque a story based only on one chapter so i have nothing bad to say :-) there were some grammer mistakes but it didnt bother me.

I cant wait for the next chapter!