This is... beautiful. Why does it all seem so calm and peaceful?

The Burning stage reminded me of a dream someone I knew had; I remember that she was in a plane that crashed and she saw the other three people on the plane were nothing more than piles of ashes. Every time I went to the next chapter, I felt that sort of emptiness, that something was missing. This is all so peaceful; I don't get it. Beautiful work...

yes i like this for wrapping it up nice ending :) keep it! good job (again haha) :D

i love how the tree kind of flew away. it reminded me of Castle in the Sky, great ending. i enjoyed this story so much! thanks for sharing (:

wonderful ending to this chapter. . . really sad :/ good job.

yay, more! haha i love this story it's so creepy. stuff melting? that would be so scary. . . another good one. it gave me the chills :)

Very creepy! I feel like this should be in the horror genre rather than fantasy. People's eyes and arms falling off? Such grotesque imagery! I find this story very suspenseful, as so far every change has been worse than the last. Will humanity be able to survive another? Or will it be the end of them? Hmm...

I like that the whole thing is written both simply and descriptively, without ever becoming sidetracked from the changes taking place.

Is your paragraphing system intentional? It looks like every paragraph has been cut off after a set number of words. I actually prefer this to large chunks of text, even if the sentences do appear to end at random. It's very unusual.

I have to say that you have an interesting story in the works here. However I would turn these chapters of yours into a prologue. Also even though youre descriptive you could always be more so especially if youre striving toward a novel. Youll never get there with such short chapters.

aw, this is the last one you have up :(

this one was really creepy. . . i liked it. the format was different though. it stopped it from flowing as nice :( but it was still good. upload more soon, please (: i'm intrigued haha.

this one was really cool too. it gave me goosebumps, it was creepy haha. i liked it, good job :)

whoa, this is really cool. i love the idea :) it's very poetic and original. good job.

mind R&R my story Comet? i'd like your opinion. thanks(:

I've enjoyed reading what you have posted so far. The stages you have written about are creepily intriguing. I particularly liked the idea of the singing stage because generally singing is such a beautiful thing but the idea that everyone must sing and listen against their will, thats creepy. Now I have a question: Are you going to be writing solely about the stages or will there be characters to follow through the descent?