Reviews for Half the World Away
Clouded and Instincts chapter 10 . 8/17/2011
sweet story! lol i can't wait for your next update
LauraBerry chapter 9 . 12/25/2010
love it! more pleasse
ebs12 chapter 8 . 8/24/2010
i loked the speach begging layla not to turn into her mother and i really like freya - i think she'll keep things interesting as long as she keeps a balance between energetic teenager and would be adult. update soon
bree chapter 8 . 8/23/2010
I LOVE freya. She is a well-developed character, a useful plot device, and - above all - a wonderful personality. I hope she stays.
Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 8 . 8/23/2010
I love it!

Can't wait for more!
Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 7 . 8/18/2010
becky1319 chapter 6 . 8/16/2010
Don't apologise for your writing, hon, especially since you write wonderfully :D

Bex x
ebs12 chapter 6 . 8/13/2010
thank you for calling it football, i HATE when it's called soccer and there is a reason that everyone prefers man u - they rule. like how their friendship is starting to develop, though i did prefer the cheesy ending to the previous chap. update soon
Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 6 . 8/11/2010
I love it.

Can't wait for more!
Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 5 . 8/8/2010
Can't wait for more!
ebs12 chapter 5 . 8/7/2010
i liked it. yes, it was a little cheesy how they started over, reintroducing themselves, but it got the point you were trying to make across. keep updating
Golden Perception chapter 4 . 8/3/2010
Great chapter, update soon!
metallicdiamond chapter 2 . 8/3/2010
Funny story...I made tuna casserole today

Le Tigre chapter 4 . 8/2/2010
BB, I first clicked onto this story just under half-an-hour ago as it was intrigues me as to what exactly is the American impression of England (the comment about perpetual rainfall, although partially true, is a slight misconception of our actual climate). Your writing is very good, you have a godd flow, though you need to consider breaking down your paragraphs more - Chapter 2 started with an rather daunting block of text - breaking them down makes it easier to read.

You have done your research into the English school system which is good, I once read a story were the protagonist attended school in England, yet was in their juniour year (not possible). However, I feel that the characters speech in particular portrays a very generalised image of the English and the lack of colloquial terms makes the story seems like it is set more in the Home Counties, rather than in the North of England. As with Liverpool (my homeland) there is a lot of area-specific slang used in Manchester that could perhaps, if used, add to the depth of the story, since that is where it is set.

I'm sorry if I came across as rude or mean in any way, I just want to help. I feel that avoiding any misrepresentation of setting could help improve your story (as any aspiring writer wishes to do). PM me if you have any further concerns, my pen-name is Le Tigre.
ebs12 chapter 4 . 8/2/2010
both such cute couples ;) but seriously - poor Lyla, felt so bad for her
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