Characters- I didn't get a huge sense of characterization in this chapter except for the rape victim. The other characters seemed just one dimensional to me, but I think that's only because I don't know them in the earlier chapters. At this point I think it's good that you didn't focus too much on the secondaries save for Reggie and the victim.

Pace- This had a steady pace, I didn't notice a place where it slowed down or became boring or anything like that. It managed to hold my attention throughout and it started strong and ended strong too.

Other/Trauma- Alright, so here's where things get interesting, and you mentioned wanting criticism on the trauma of the scene specifically, so here we go. I think the group dynamics with Jimmy and Reggie weren't intense enough-things like gang rape, which is what happened, are driven by group frenzy, and I didn't feel it here. Instead there was a calmness about them that I didn't find exactly believable, especially after being so hyped about beating the victim up in the beginning of the chapter. I think their violence would wave into a sudden sort of forgetting-what-you're-doing as being part of the group. Instead they seemed very hesitant and calculatory, and that seemed to me more like a serene lone serial killer who had the whole thing planned. Because you imply that the rape wasn't planned, I think it should be more amped up and scary, I think there shouldn't be discussion of, "do you want to rape this guy?" but instead, someone should take the lead and just start doing it. Once that person starts doing it, then Jimmy or whoever can follow, and then Reggie could perhaps stand out and not give in to the group panic. So I think you could work on that the most with this scene. I'm also not sure what happened to the Melissa character-she was there, hesitant, and then she wasn't mentioned again during the rape or after. Other than that though, on the victim's side, I think you handled his reactions and sadness alright. It's the after-trauma that will be difficult to write, I think, at least from his perspective.

Spelling/Grammar-

What the hell was going on?

-Style: could replace "going on" with "happening"

I cried out again when I felt a second blow against my cheek.

-Style: could omit "again"

...hitting me again before I got a chance to gather myself.

-Style: could omit "again" and then tighten up the sentence like, "hitting me before I could gather myself." to get rid of the dead verb "got" in the clause

...into the ground by some unknown hand.

-Edit: I'm not sure if the characters are inside or outside, but if they're inside, you should have "ground" be "floor"-but again, if it's outside, you're fine, I'm just not sure so I thought I'd mention

"...fucking fag, too." Christian said, and Max agreed.

-Edit: period after "too" should be a comma, and would end sentence on "said" and put "Max agreed." as a separate sentence in a new paragraph

"Hey, could ya hold him down? I can't keep him still." Jimmy called from behind my flailing body.

-Edit: period after "still" should be comma

...me back into the ground: Reggie.

-Edit: "ground" should be "floor"

Finally started allowing nonmembers to review :D

This story can be summed up in one extended word:

AMAZING!

Easy fix review game! I'll be going along as I read, so forgive me if this sounds fragmented.

"I flexed by arm..." should it be "I flexed my arm"?

"A light was turned on a light" - what does this mean?

"I didn't really want them too" - is it "I didn't really want them to"?

Those are some of the errors I caught while reading this. Aside from them, the language was in general decent. I also liked how you were able to maintain the intensity of the mood throughout the chapter.

I can't say too much about the plot, since I'm jumping right into this chapter, but I did find the beating a little unrealistic, since being hit with metal on the head several times would most definitely put the guy unconscious. While I think describing the scene in vivid detail helped establish the mood, I also felt that it was exaggerated. Perhaps toning it down a little bit might give it a starker tone.

Just guessing, but is Reggie trying to save the guy here? He refused to rape the guy, and is also suggesting to take him away on his own (without Jimmy and the others). I'm just suspicious.

That's all. Good work.

This story is so intense and powerful; I love it! Please update again soon, with the way you left the last chapter hanging, I cannot wait for the next chapter!

Man. This is sad. It was so worth the wait.

How can Reggie be such a douche?

I think, that secretly, very very secretly, he loves Todd.

Just saying(:

Anyways, please please please update soon.

-Anna-

Oh my god! How could Reggie do that to him!

I love your style of writing. I really hope you carry on writing because I think this story's great.

I can't wait to see what Reggie's reaction is...

More please!

Poor Todd :( I want to cry for him.

Oh wow! This story is amazing. Please, please, please update soon. :D

-Anna-

ah what will happen to him?

Noras a betch!

poor Todd :(

Can't wait for more!

E~ I can't wait to see what happens next! *_* Update~

That was really sweet that chapter. I love the ending of it~ ;-;

Well, things are just getting worse and worse for Todd. Reggie's a peach! Nora's also a bitch. Good update.

Of course he would take acid and lose his mind! Now I can see he's an idiot! Poor Todd! Good update!

Haha aww nice chapter. Jimmy is the usual dumb jock isn't he?

Not really liking him that much. And Todd, I feel really bad for him, I'd totally be his friend. It's nice that Reggie's being nice to him, for now at least. I would make a prediction of what's going to happen next but as you said, I probably don't know for sure. The ending was cute, nice way to wrap up the chapter and sort of foreshadow what's going to happen in Reggie and Todd's relationship.

Anyway great chapter! You're right, it's kind of sad that this story doesn't have more followers because it really is a great topic to write about and I'm sure you've got a lot in store for it. But continue writing for yourself and the readers will come along eventually, I assure you (:

~Idareutoguess