|Reviews for Strawberry frosting in your hair|
| classic violet chapter 1 . 12/29/2011
I adore the diction in this.
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
At the moment, I'm staring and smiling a particularly awe-inspiring painting.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
I like this piece because it's pretty happy, which is different for you. A nice change from the other two pieces I just read.
I also really like the title. Though you don't mention that in the piece I think it really works well with the piece.
The beginning two lines were really great. When I read them I expected the piece to be not happy since there was no kiss, but the change into spooning and the rest of the scene was really great because it was unexpected.
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| nickyO chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
Lovely, brings the reader right into the moment. Great job.
| wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
I love the sensation in this poem, it feels like the snapshot of a moment. The details especially 'your toes scratch at my legs' etc are so intimate and easily felt from the words.
| Black Sparrow chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
This is superly cute :) Love it. Great job!
| Humanit-E chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
This poem depicted such a simple day of passionate serenity between a couple. I think it's really well expressed and sweet. Well done!
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