Reviews for No Words
rchll chapter 1 . 10/8/2015
This was such an interesting piece. I find your treatment slightly ironic given the location of this story! I love how you described how the shopkeeper was challenging you...the whole bit with the piece of paper. Brilliant. There are a few run-on sentences here - try reading some of the longer lines out loud and you'll find that they are a bit bumpy. I thought you ended this story well. Btw, the writing is very natural (I know you wrote this a while ago, still reassurance is nice nonetheless)!
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/27/2010
"only three storeys high"... stories

"Cantonese radio channel was blared over speakers inside the mall."... either "channel was blaring" or "channel blared"

I really like this piece. Your descriptions are beautiful. The way describe the sky and the apartments were wonderful. I also like the whole paper thing. It's a great image and the way you carried it out through the end of the piece was really great. But, my favorite part was the cocktail that was such a perfect description of what the person was feeling and written so well too. I also really liked the story here. You really felt for the narrator, but it also made an interesting point about how people judge people and discriminate against people.

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el starry chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
i really enjoyed reading this. i like the way your writing flows and once i began, i wanted to keep going to see where you would take it.
KMith chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
I can definitely tell that you wrote this without a struggle! It really comes through. I totally cringed at the painful parts. I'm jealous of this story... you capture the subtle emotions of such a scene effortlessly, without any gushy, flowery language. It's REAL. Nicely done! :)