Reviews for Midoans
Guest chapter 3 . 5/10
Question: So is this story going to be a slaves revolt and kill master sort of fic or slave eventually fall in love with their master sort of fic
Azure Shine chapter 32 . 3/9
I love this but I think the ending is to rush. I thought Nika still jealous and she should be and poison Kimari or something to kill the baby. Nika is too rush to forget Her own master and go to another man. And I still annoyed with the ending, it not bad end but I still cant forgive Aragan. I think he need suffer first. What he did to Kimari is unforgivable. I am crying when Kinera got raped and so angry want to kill him! I dont hate Aragon but maybe dislike him, its okay he got happy end but he need got karma or something first.
F.Y chapter 1 . 11/17/2016
TO THE READERS:
Before you dive into this story, I'd like you to know that this isn't a romantic love story, but the brutal rape and torture of a young girl. She eventually falls for her captor (HELLO, STOCKHOLM SYNDROME) because of a series of humiliating, painful, and absolutely inhumane acts that she is forced to participate in. GUYS, THIS IS NOT LOVE.

TO ALL THE REVIEWERS PRAISING THIS WORK:
There is nothing, NOTHING, you can say to justify keeping a young woman captive. That is psychologically fucked up and you all know it.

TO THE WRITER:
WHY? Why place so much emphasis on Kimari's refusal to submit to captivity, only to pair the rapist with the victim at the end? How did a story about a young woman's will to survive continued abuse turn into this twisted version of a happy ending?
guest chapter 32 . 10/4/2016
She loved her rapist? Seriousy? After the 50 shades of rape he put her through. He forced not only rape but forced pregnancy on her plus humiliation and physical beatings. This kind of sexual violence have psychological impact. I am surprised that why the hell she didnot find a way to slit his throat. And stabbed his spawn to death. This seems more like twisted stolkholm syndrome happy ending to me where rapist has it all.
tothe1whoknows chapter 32 . 10/9/2015
The things that annoy the heck out of me:
- The usage of modern endearment such as "baby." This is a historical story, no? While pleasantly reading through your chapters, suddenly they the hero would go "Come on, baby" - oh my god, that just totally irks me and throws me off the narrative. It's like I'm watching a movie and suddenly I'm punched out of my seat and lose my bearing.
- The exclusiveness of suspension points. They're everywhere. It's like the characters can't seem to speak correctly, or when it's a thought process, they can't think straight and their thoughts are always chopped up.
- The fact that many questions don't get question marks. This has confused me many times because they're clearly questions being asked, but I do not read them as questions-which renders the sentence all the more confusing.
- The redundancy of the word "peek". It's like the girl can't do anything else but peek at him every single time. It creates an image in my head that she only has one eyeball glaring through her hair and that hear head is tilted in a weird way. I got annoyed to the point I had to gloss over the word, sometimes I tried to imagine it invisible and think up another verb to replace it.
That is the power of performative language. Words have power to affect how one feels and act.

Heh. I realized how peeved I sound. I guess I was just a little too invested in your story. Annoyances aside, I want to thank you for creating it. Even though I hated the rape, the forced seduction, and the bullying, I kept on reading it. Ugh, that does say something about me huh.
In any case, this is the first time I came across fictionpress and yours is the first story I've read. I will look further into your other works. Keep writing! Writers are cool. I don't have the talent to write, hence why I'm here reading off other people's work. Good luck and all the best for your future stories.
LetMeWonder chapter 32 . 5/1/2015
This story was lovey. :) I was very frustrated, scared, indignant and tearful a couple times, but I've made it through! Thank you!
Guest chapter 2 . 3/7/2015
Without doubt, Ballan is the most emasculated character i have read in years. He may as well have been castrated. That he 'likes what he is' is the best denouncement of self-imposed slavery (aka BDSM submission) ever written. You must be effectively lobotomised to embrace such a limiting and artificial 'lifestyle'. It's sickening that anyone could write such tripe or read it and enjoy it. The 'master'/dom needs some jail time for such abhorent crimes. They all do.
Guest chapter 32 . 2/23/2015
So at best the story is engaging but face facts, is essentially about abuse. I mean 50 shades of misogyny, right? 50 shades of anti-romance. 50 shades of take a long hard look at yourself and get some therapy.
Inequality (all kinds, physical, social, intellectual, financial, etc) in any relationship leads to abuse. But what's really messed up is the too-idiotic-for-words idea that she could fall in love with her rapist. That's actually deeply insulting to abused and enslaved women everywhere and everyone who 'loved it' should go to Afganastan or some other backward hell-hole where crimes like this actually happen. Shame on you. Talk about 'dumbinated' bimbos.
This is garbage.
Moon Sage chapter 32 . 10/7/2014
Ah,, very nice very nice
Luontoiti chapter 1 . 6/25/2014
Maybe is pointless to say but this is confusing and annoying to read because you use three dots so many times. Argh!
Unorginal chapter 4 . 6/16/2014
"Remember to R&R"
me: Sure ill rest and refit
and even though this is hella late considering you finished the story, I'm loving it so far.
would fav if i had an account

1, Props to you, thumbs up
K chapter 32 . 1/4/2014
OK, honeybun, IRREGARDLESS. Not a Word. Just clearin' that up.
Princess Wanderer chapter 22 . 12/20/2013
whoever wrote this NEEDS to check when it should be "too" and when it should be "to" the mistakes are super confusing
Guest chapter 32 . 10/27/2013
Gosh that was beautiful! :) I literally can't stop my eyes from reading and my heart from getting all nervous and excited as to how things will go.
R chapter 25 . 9/30/2013
Found your story a few hours ago and CANNOT STOP READING! I have skipped all my schoolwork and the gym. You are a fantastic writer.
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