This is leaving a bad taste in my mouth... I liked Commanders but this is too much like rape. I hope Kimiri ties him up and whips him, that would be funny. :)

I want to KILL Aragan! Please, make him suffer! It's not even in Kimari's nature to submit, but under her circumstances, how could she not unless she were immortal. Argh! I hope Kimari stays strong mentally because that BASTARD has her body.

hey, its a really nice story. i luv it plz update it soon, just wanted to ask if there will be some romance later in story coz right now its quite harsh

I just have to say that I love your style of writing and hope that you continue to update this story!

I have to say I really like this story. I think there are some things that could be cleaned up, like the repitition of the verb to admit. ~jlr

You know... this story reminds me of a quote from a korean drama; memories of bali. ah, what was it excatly? "not loving you is the only pride i have left" yep, that sound very much like kimari.

Oh my, I can't wait for the Chapter 14!

Oh, he is so arrogant! I wish that Kimari could win some of these battles. He has made up in his twisted mind that thru the humiliation, name calling, beating, and other forms of degrading, Kimari is going to submit. I love what she told him the reason she was never going to submit. I hope she drives him MAD and insane! Can't wait for more!

so I'm back...and I have to say that even though I get the whole"guys a jackass but becomes nice and everyone forgives and all is happy etc"...the thought makes me ill...I mean the guy repeatedly rapes her...there is no forgiveness in that, I don't want to be mean about your moms story or anything but seriously? if the story ends with her in love with Aragorn EVEN if he suddenly acts all nice then thats still not love...it's stockholme syndrome, and maybe i'm wrong and she will end up cutting off Aragorns man bits and running away with Jason. But if not then i have to admit i will have a sour taste in my mouth at the end of this story which is too bad because I really did enjoy "commanders" and look forwards to the sequel but I honestly don't think i can stomach this story...maybe your mom didn't realize how bad it comes out when she was writing it but I think you guys might want to consider re reading it, and making it less horrific, becasue while rape etc in stories is one thing as it's a horrible fact in life, calling it romance is not only offensive, but disturbing.

i'm sorry if this is offensive and again i stress how much i've enjoyed commanders but I can't stomach this one.

he is seriously gonna get her pregnant if he keeps doing that... (.

Ah - I think he may figure it out sooner or later that he'll have better luck with kindness?

I love this. At the moment though, I would say that the most appealing guy in the whole story is Jason, so I'm hoping that she ends up with him...even though I think this is unlikely.

I had to stop reading about chapter six cause my mom needed my help. I was a little mad. I really like it so far, I cant wait for more.

oh, ho-ho-ho. jason in love with kimari!

Really enjoying this story!

And my vote is for you to start posting the sequel to Commanders