|Reviews for Near Me Not|
| Eternal Skies chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
this is so beautiful!
your improvement is evident here. i like how these lines made me feel (not that negative feelings are good, but the important thing is that i felt it): depressed, sad, lonely yet pushing people away, and this also made me feel like i was the narrator-not the one snooping around his business.
about the narrator's voice:
"Leave me alone, leave me be," sounded so desperate i felt pity but that's probably what the narrator doesn't want me to do
"for it only hurts the remains of my pride." i heard this sentence whispered weakly, as if the narrator was crying
i loved it that i was able to hear THE voice.