This is a really good story. Please update soon!

can't wait for the next chapter

are you on wattpad too?

I just wanted to let you know that this is a good story and I enjoy reading it, but that it is hard to read when the entire chapter is crammed into one paragraph. Eyes wander and people get confused so they don't know where they were reading or even whats going on anymore. I recomend starting a new paragraph at least whenever a new person is speaking if not also when you have concluded onw train of thought. I hope you update soon.

great story hope to see/read more soon

i like your story but could you maybe format it better cause its all clumped up right now and it makes it hard to read it.

okay, love it so far, but the only thing is that in this chapter, there are no paragraphs, or if there are, i can't see them, its very hard to see who's talking and keep track of where i am up to in this chapter. but apart from that, very good, can't wait for the next chapter :D

love it plz ud soon :D

Aw. What a great chapter. I can't believe that Viv was actually going to kill her own sister. But I know how power hungry wolves can get lol. Can't wait unitl the next update! Hope you update soon!

It seems that you have been reading Blood and Chocolate. Many of the pasages are extremely similar. You should mention as an author's note somewhere that this is a spin off of the book, for copyright purposes. It is way too alike not too.

Interesting read, has potential. Needs better layout and editing. Not sure if that is just how FP formatted it, or if you were trying to make things jumbled - which would have worked for certain scenes but didn't for others (for me).

I just came across your story it's great. I can't wait to read more. just one tiny suggestion and it probably wasn't even your doing. The text is so meshed that it makes it difficult to read. Fp has issues when publishing sometimes so check it out when you add the next chapter. but can't wait.

if you don't continue you'll just make me have to reAD IT again and again until you do!

Cant wait for more chapters :)

I love your story! Grace reminds me a me! hehe. I hope you update soon. I wanna see what happens next so don't take longer than it takes to write the chapter! I need to know!

Tootles,

Roselyn