|Reviews for blinding|
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 12/4/2010
your line breaks really add to the essence of this poem. i loved the first stanza.
| sharks don't sleep chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
This poem seems to have a few too many ideas going on at once to me. There are images that don't quite fit (the first stanza, which is beautiful, seems out of place with the third stanza on), and this makes it hard to understand the poem as a whole. I would suggest taking out some of the stanzas that really do not add to the feeling and message of the piece, or reworking them until they do.
Each part is individually striking, but as a reader I saw no common thread, and that missing backbone is keeping this from being its best.