Reviews for Til Forever Ends
newlY chapter 1 . 8/25/2010
i wish my room looked like the inside of a banana. :D

lol keep writing! i love pensacola and it's one of the places i want to visit most! pensacola christian college is like my dream school. :P
Tathwem Essenuejal chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
This is a brilliant work on the making. It is so beautifully written with realistic characters and a realistic plot. I sincerely enjoy this could be masterpiece. The one criticism I have is that some of your paragraphs could be combined into bigger paragraphs. Some of the thoughts are broken up just a little too much. I also reccomend using more commas and semi colons where you use periods just to make it seem less choppy, but still be read the same. I do really love this though keep up the excelent work and I cannot wait for your next chapter.