|Reviews for King of Broken Hearts|
| Nakehaton chapter 1 . 8/10/2010
The idea for this is quite interesting...
The statistics part was a bit confusing, perhaps because I just saw the numbers and they didn't really have any meaning for me. (Who can imagine 2,345,0 people...) Either way, I see that there is a very small chance of dying of a broken heart... Also, the way it was set up added further confusion to that paragraph. (New discovery I've made is that statistics give me headaches... Oh well.)
Also, I've read the rest of the chapters that are currently up...I don't know why I'm reviewing the first chapter. I like Austin, he sounds like a cute little kid. And Aria does seem like a bitch, but only a little.
Also, seeing as how they are so old.. I would have expected them to have more wisdom and act more appropriately.
| iRemedy chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
I'm guessing your character's original name was Oliver but you changed it to Daniel, and forgot to change the first line from "L-lord Oliver," to "L-lord Daniel,"