Reviews for Fish Know About Love
effervescent-sentiments chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Hah, how funny. I judged prompts for TaD. And now I'm reading this. xD

Anyway, very cute. Tres adorable. We both know it's terribly cliche but we're also both okay with that, so I won't comment on that.

Some things I will comment on: Take out the adverbs. Don't use a word unless you know its meaning and how to use it in a sentence. Don't add unnecessary drama ("like this was goodbye") to heighten the climax - it was enough without that, I promise. And it still confuses me. I'd call that a plot hole, actually. I'd take out Ryan's character and just have Clay be Bryan's friend - too many characters, and Ryan doesn't really come into play much.

I think that's enough to be getting on with. Keep writing!

Jules
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