Reviews for Beast Syndrome
Emile Amadare chapter 18 . 8/6/2011
Yay! 3
brightsun89 chapter 18 . 7/28/2011
I love it!
poisonpensumi chapter 15 . 6/16/2011
Who's Leila? I thought Amanda was the good friend that knew about the "might-be-gay" thing...?
gaia-x-goddess chapter 17 . 6/15/2011
I really like this, nice mix of slash and scifi, basically the stuff of my dreams :D well written and cute. I like.
Emile Amadare chapter 17 . 6/14/2011
This chapter needs a lot of editing for commas and little mistakes. But I'm really looking forward to the next update.
brightsun89 chapter 17 . 6/13/2011
I love it! have fun in Thailand! im so jealous lol
Emile Amadare chapter 16 . 5/22/2011
Good chapter :] But O.o did you change the rating to T...?
brightsun89 chapter 16 . 5/21/2011
I love it! :)
Emile Amadare chapter 15 . 5/16/2011
lol you review whore xD I loved the chapter (still desperately waiting for some real romance...). I love the drama, and sure this part may have been a little rushed but you aren't rushing the rest of their relationship like I would end up doing. As for mistakes, I didn't notice anything except a few missing quotations marks.
brightsun89 chapter 15 . 5/16/2011
I love it! poor sean! are you going to update soon? please do!
Emile Amadare chapter 14 . 3/22/2011
Going too fast? You should read MY stories! By chapter 14, my stories are coming to a climax. DX You're a very good author, at least in my opinion and compared to me. :] Great chapter.

I thought I should maybe start helping out authors by pointing out some mistakes in the writing. I'm not going to critique, because I'm not a literature nazi and really shouldn't be critiquing when my writing sucks, I'm just going to point out things like puncuation or missing/reapeated words and verb tense mess-ups. :]

Here are some things I caught in this chapter:

"Would you go further." - "Would you go further[?]"

"I think uncle is gonna start getting worried." - "I think [my] uncle is gonna start getting worried."

my uncle[']s voice echoed from downstairs. - my uncle[']s voice echoed from downstairs.

" you anything about Beast Syndrom at all?" - " you [know] anything about Beast Syndrom at all?"

I was glad he could tell it was something I wanted to talk about. - I was glad he could tell it was something I [didn't want] to talk about.

" you understand." - " you understand[?]"

Colin pauses and looks at me seriously. - Coline [paused] and [looked] at me seriously.
brightsun89 chapter 14 . 3/20/2011
love it! Im so happy you updated!
Emile Amadare chapter 13 . 1/18/2011

You make the relationship-building so long. GRR. But I guess that's a good thing. Unlike with me, how I make my characters fall in love and get together just like BANG. .

This chapter seemed to move fast compared to your usual writing... I'm the LAST person who should be critisizing that, but it's just something I noticed.

Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter.

Each time they kiss and act like nothing happened, I wanna smack 'em.
brightsun89 chapter 13 . 1/14/2011
lol love it! poor dante and sean! please update soon!
brightsun89 chapter 12 . 12/21/2010
love it! please update soon!
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