|Reviews for Perfect Swindlers|
| Eternal Skies chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
I didn't get the poem until the last verse and I read it all over again.
It's sad to see the birth of love, and then it's death. Makes you critical of the existance of real love, but it must be there.
| MRM15 chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Ahh, I made this mistake of reading your authors note before I read the poem. To be completely 100% open and honest: the image was not there at all. I've written poetry before and I know that words are chosen so carefully so it is rude when someone wants to make a change. However, my advice for this poem would be to create the characters that you want to have as the speakers. The voice throughout the poem is consistent. If there was a change in voice, the presents of two characters would be more obvious to the reader.
Creating an image with a poem is a hard task. For a first attempt, it was a good shot! Message me if you make any changes. I'm always good for an honest review.
Author of: The Death Deities