|Reviews for heartbroken poet|
| FieldCommanderCohen chapter 1 . 8/8/2010
I like that I can see where you were going, instead of this just being a load of vague imagery. The one thing I would have you change is changing the "he" in the second stanza to "you" because of the last three stanzas. It was a bit confusing for me until I read your note.
And you don't need to use metaphors/similes/imagery into every line, it takes away from the genuine feel of the piece.
| Gothic Hermit chapter 1 . 8/8/2010
Okay I read your a/n before the poem.
Apparently, your poems read a lot like prose. Because I've read the a/n first, the repetition of 'heart' became a cause of irritation. I am repetition cautious.
And in reply to the last line of your a/n, start looking for a new love (:
Sounds insincere, but it shows whether if you really love the person. You normally fall in and out of love with someone because it's a crush. You love this person, but realized a flaw. Came to know a positive character trait which is stronger than the flaw and came to like him again.
| V.C.Kazz chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
i love the depth and darkness to this. ur metaphors are awesome too!great poem