|Reviews for All's Dare in Love and Soccer|
| xxSongBirdxx chapter 34 . 6/29/2013
Loved this cute fluffy story thanks for sharing ill also check out your other stories too
| Guest chapter 36 . 5/8/2013
OMG, I'm SOOOO totally with you on the whole 'sequels about a couple who have already gotten together' bring boring thing! I mean they've already gotten together, there sooo obviously gonna staaay together, so why the heck would anyone write... Ooo-Kay looks like I've been ranting! Sorry about that :P anyways i promise I'll R&R ur next story...well that's about it so bah-bye!
| vr chapter 36 . 4/13/2013
AWW. CAN U PLS WRITE A SEQUEL?
| M.Suzanne chapter 36 . 4/2/2013
For some reason, my computer won't let me log into my account, but the name above is my username if for some reason you feel the need to respond - I just hate leaving anon reviews because I like to attach my name to everything that I do. That being said.
I loved the story - it was very light-hearted and cute and the characters were very fun. Your "heroine" in this story was very likable and while I have some concrit, it all boils down to the fact that I finished reading your story because you made me like your characters and I wanted them to have their happy ending!
You have already completed this story, so there really isn't anything that I can say or do that will change this actual story, but perhaps it can help you going forward with any other stories, or hey! If you ever want to go back and rewrite this one. Who knows?
First thing, I wish there had been a little more character development. For instance, I want to know more about the relationship between Erin and Evan. Obviously, they have a close relationship because their parents are always out of town, but how does that affect them as siblings? I don't see Evan's character as particularly over-protective (which is 100% fine) but I do notice that you touched a little upon him getting concerned when he first felt that she may be getting close to Tyler emotionally - specifically the line, "you're my business."
And what about the relationship between Tyler and Evan? You mentioned that Tyler had never been to the house - why is that? I would think that Tyler's mom would be enough of a deterant for him to want to keep everyone out of his house so I would think he would spend as much time elsewhere as possible. Or maybe they aren't the type of best friends to hang out outside of school because Tyler doesn't want to get attached to another "best friend" and lose him like Call.
Speaking of Call, I would have loved to see a little more of their relationship play out - some more drama between Call and Tyler. It would have been so awesome to see Call date Erin (not for revenge, Call is a nice guy and not intentionally an ass) but you know that once he realized that Tyler actually liked her, that he would want to get under his skin a little seeing as how in Call's mind, Tyler stole the girl that he loved away from him.
A little more self reflection on the part of Erin herself would have been good - especially when it came to the dares. I think Tyler hit the nail on the head when he said that she does the dares to overcompensate for the lack of attention from her parents. I would have liked to seen that explored a little more.
And while this isn't anything against the story you did write, but I do think you missed an amazing opportunity with Tyler's employment. Just think, he could have been secretly making her cupcakes and sweets as a secret admirer for months without her knowing where they were coming from!
The only thing that through me off completely were Tyler's parents. I get the role of Victoria - the over-bitchy, super controlling snob who only wants riches for her son and a booming business for herself, but if that were the case, then why did she marry a high school soccer coach? Did I miss something pivotal? Did they get divorced and you explained all this and I just missed it somehow? You probably did, but even so, I would have loved for that to come into play. Because if that's the case, I am pretty sure her mother threw a fit when SHE married a high school teacher lol.
I hope that my novel of a review didn't throw you off, I really did enjoy your story. LIke I said, it was very light-hearted and a fun, good read. I haven't read your spin-off story yet, but it is defintely on my to-do list. Keep up the good writing! :)
| awsehujikoza chapter 15 . 2/25/2013
wow, this is really good. I would carry on but it's midnight and I have school tomorrow. Cant's wait to finish it.
| Tay chapter 19 . 10/21/2012
I literally started to cry, I was laughing so hard
| Delilah Lillith chapter 7 . 10/19/2012
I'm so confused with you changing the grades. In the beginning she was fifteen then in the previous chapters she was seventeen and a junior, which made everything made sense. Now shes fifteen and a sophomore again. If she was fifteen she wouldn't be able to drive yet so she shouldn't have a car yet, and if Tyler went from being a senior to a junior it doesn't explain why he's in her class anymore. I think if you wanted to change the ages she should have been a junior who can drive and he should be a senior about to go to college... Other than the confusion I like how this is coming along.
| Draycono chapter 36 . 9/30/2012
I love this story 3 so much, that I ended up staying up all night just to finish reading it trying hard not to laugh though probably made me look like a creep cause i couldnt stop smiling and giggling throughout the whole story xD
| PerfectlyImperfect36 chapter 34 . 9/18/2012
Absolutely loved it. :-)
| Loralee Abercrombie chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
I really like this chapter. I think Erin's meeting with the player is darn near perfect. Great job!
| Amber Ice Fox chapter 34 . 9/14/2012
I'm really glad I found your story! It was a great read :)
| butter-me-up chapter 11 . 9/14/2012
I think im in love with you not only are a tmi fan but you're also a greste writer, i love it so far! :3
| Matty Moo chapter 34 . 9/1/2012
Awesome story, I loved it :D
| GreenstoneRie chapter 36 . 8/29/2012
I really really love this story. You are a very talented writer.
Does this mean you aren't writing the music story because i was looking forward to it
| Robin chapter 3 . 8/25/2012
I don't like charley, she's a bitch and a REAL friend wouldn't do things to get their friends in trouble. She's a manipulative bully and Erin is just one big push over.
but the plot and story had potential. I just didn't like the characters.