I like how you're able to bring so much into a semi short chapter - you explained so much but in a very organized way. I will be looking forward to another chapter.

"Water spilled down his bare chest, soaking into the sheets below him. Well, at least he wouldn't be hot anymore."

Hahaha! Thats kinda funny.

This story interests me. I think its a good start and I'm looking forward to reading more :D

I'm guessing Lily is her little sister?

Can't wait to see how this fic develops! Is it going to be short or long?