Oh good, another story! Prolific little author aren't you? LOL! And you had a need to write something 'hot'? (I get in those moods too.) You definitely succeeded in you're goal. I see you've included 'angst' - oh dear...will I end up sniffling all over my keyboard again?

April is definitly the party girl and Harmony seems to have a good head on her shoulders. Hope Jessie doesn't regret her evening. Kai is an interesting name btw.

Looking forward to more!

Yay, a new story! I'm beyond excited. This chapter was very setup-ish, but I figured it would be. I'm interested in where you're going to go with this, since you said it was going to be different than most one night stand stories. I have to admit, I'm hoping she doesn't end up pregnant, but if she does, I'm sure you'll make it work.

I noticed a few times, especially in the beginning that you used 'that' in places you could've used something with less emphasis without losing any effect. I know what you were trying to do, but it came off as somewhat clunky and overdone. 'That' can be a surprisingly powerful word, so using it too much becomes grating.

You also had a tendency to cram long descriptions of things before the object itself in a way that seemed rough and tended to jerk me out of the mood of your writing. An example is: "Jessie sighed, her numb from alcohol and an amazing orgasm body, enjoying the sensation of him plunging into her." I think it would be smoother if it read: "Jessie sighed, her body, numb from alcohol and an amazing orgasm, enjoying the sensation of him plunging into it." Maybe it's a preference thing, but I think it reads better that way.

Still, both the things I just mentioned are pretty minor and overall I enjoyed this first chapter. I'm looking forward to what happens next.

P.S. I revoted for your stories over at SKoW. My fingers are crossed in hopes that you'll win.

Nicely written. I've read all of your other stories, and this one is definitely on par. I like that you chose something a bit more light-hearted (I doubt I'd be able to sit through another Thoughtless).

The story so far is a bit cliché, but you've put your own spin on it. I especially like the way you characterized Kai; he seems more realistic than the typical Adonis, if that makes any sense. Overall, it's great!

Update soon!