love the end! it was so cute. especially the part about christian starting to grow on aaron :)

I'm really enjoying your story.

Would love to hear this story from Christian's POV a little more. You started with both POV.

Anyway post again soon.

Rae.

The movie-Christian-carrying-Aaron-to-bed scene was adorable!

Looking forward to the next chapter c:

WOW! Who does your editing? They must be gods! The grammar is simply superb!

Eh? EH? Didn't you have a different prologue? I came back to re-read it and it's DIFFERENT! I swear I'm not delusional, it was there! o.o

...I kinda liked the old one... ;_;

sorry for the awfully late review. my internet broke and we just got it back up.

if it isnt too late, i wouldnt mind beta-ing for you. i really love the story :)

I love Aaron. I just want to hug him. And ruffle his hair. And give him a cookie. He's just too cute! xD

And I would so be willing to beta you! I can be a real grammar-freak, so even though punctuation isn't my friend, either, I can totally beat it's sorry as* into submission! :D

I've found on fictionpress that often, the chapters the writers hate the most, the readers like the most!

I really enjoyed this chapter, although I agree with Jill and Aaron that what Christian did was really insensitive, even if Aaron didn't have issues to deal with already. I mean, Christian doesn't know Aaron's sexuality, so forcing him to 'come out' in a magazine or something, even if just for fun, is pretty nasty. I hope Aaron gets a real nice apology :3

I cna't wiat to see what happens between them!

I'm really enjoying this so far! I like how you're not afraid to show your character's flaws, and the characters themselves are really intriguing. They actually remind me a lot of Nate and Kieran, two of mine; even some of their lines are the same!

There quite a few typos, but another, closer read through would fix them. Something that did nearly put me off continuing, though, was your misuse of commas and periods, commas especially. You might want to double check the rules for using commas, especially around addressing characters.

I ate Grandma.

I ate, Grandma.

When addressing a character, a comma should always come before the name, or the meaning of the sentence may be completely different.

But I'm definitely interested in your story, and I'm surprised it doesn't have more reviews. I think it might partially be because of the poetic layout of the prologue. It took me a second to realize it wasn't actually a poem, and I worried for a moment that the story was going to be lay out like that.

Have you ever attended a music school before? You write it really realistically c:

wow, i love this! the way you make everything so possible like how he's messed up and the reasons behind it, it makes so much sense.

awesome writing and i'm waiting for more!

Oh my gawd, this is amazing!

i like the fact that christian didnt take everything for granted and that he even twisted the situation a little. like believing that aaron was lying. it actually seemed totally plausible once he explained it.

i also like the insight of aaron having one of his breakdowns. i like the fact that we could see how he thought it through and how desperately he tried to hold it back. loved it!

UPDATE SOON! :D

I think this has the makings of a good story so far. I'm curious to see how their relationship/rivalry develops, and how the duet goes. I feel like they could end up blowing everyone away (if they're ever able to get down to playing). Anyway! interesting premise, I'm looking forward to reading more.

i have to agree with you on the pocky subject. it's like a godsend, i love it so much :D

aw, i got a shout out :) thanks, i'm glad it was helpful to you.

i really really like this, especially cause i play the cello and kind of sort of the violin :) it's a weird thing. like i know the notes and the theory but i can never get it to work. oh well, back onto the subject. i love aaron, i'm happy to say. despite having scary meltdowns all the time, he's kind of really adorable in a little boy kind of way.

christian seems like a butt but i want to get to know him more before i make any assumptions.

it's a little early to say this but background story is very important. i know you're only in the 2nd chapter but it's very important to the reader to know about the past because then it explains the present we're reading about.

anywho, UPDATE SOON!

This is lovely(:

I don't care if it's to the side or in the center, it

s great.

AND I LOVE POCKY. It tastes phenomenal.