|Reviews for Anton on the Beach|
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
You just have this way of making flings sound so appealing. do you?
Too many things to like here. 'entered my skin like a spider bite' is such a delicious line to chew on. I could hum along to the inspiration it gives me.
Special mention to 'novices to the novelties of Catharism'. 'Catherism', especially. I'm loving that word without having an inkling of knowledge as to what it really is.
Thumbs up to you.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
Haven't seen you in the Review Marathon recently. (link in my profile).
I like this piece. I'm not going to lie, I did have to look up Catharism. But I like how your pieces make me do some research. It opens my eyes to new things and the piece makes more sense when I read it... lol.
I really like how you tie that first line in with the ending with the mouth again and then the smoke. It really tied the piece together.
The only thing I didn't like was the ending. You say he entered like a spider bite and then crawled. Wouldn't that be a spider that would crawl? Not the bite?
Other than that little nitpick, great piece as always!
| amavian chapter 1 . 8/12/2010
really liked this one. nice job.