Reviews for astray
Poisoned Twinkles chapter 1 . 3/24/2011
I love this poem very much. The start is amazing, and all the words you used are just to my taste. The deep meaning feels quite emotional, and the end just concludes it in the way that it should be ended.


young and the reckless chapter 1 . 11/1/2010
i like the whimsical imagery.

and how it all relates to nature in some way.

they're very pretty words,

even if the meaning is somewhat less grand.

well done :)
lipleaf chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
You pulled off the beginning of the poem quite nicely. Poems starting with "and" have a tendency to sound stilted and strange, so it's good to see that's not the case here. You have some lovely imagery- my favorite would probably be "you tread on dreams and fallen stars while i hang on to the moon with a string." It's a great descriptions. The line "and the city glows for you in a different way for me" was simple but but clear and you could feel the quiet emotion in it.
fleur de l'est chapter 1 . 8/26/2010
Well I must say this is too modernist for me and the best I can do is admire the imagery, which I do :) This reminds me of Chinese nootebook illustrations with those frail figures and the moon and stars.