|Reviews for Fortune's Trip|
| sweetpea265 chapter 3 . 6/6/2011
I'm liking this story so far. Hopefully it will pick up a little bit and introduce the other main characters, but other than that I think there is a pretty good pace and foundation going on. I only think it seems a little slow because we haven't been introduced to all the characters yet and it had to be broken into chapters as you completed them, but what you posted so far seems like pretty good work to me.
| sweetpea265 chapter 1 . 6/6/2011
I actually liked this. I just about skipped over it to get to the actual story, but I'm glad I read it. It's the first one I have ever seen like this and I thought it was pretty cool. I know some people aren't very good at summarizing the entire story or wetting the reader's appetite with just a couple of lines, and I thought this was a pretty awesome way to do that without giving too much away. I am extremely glad you put the little note at the beginning though because otherwise I would have had no clue what to think :)
Can't wait to read the story! Hopefully you won't see a review from me for a couple of chapters because I got so sucked in, but I'll try to remember ;)
| Anna chapter 22 . 6/5/2011
I read this all in one go and I fell in love with this story. I love love love love ittt !
| cheesecake15 chapter 22 . 6/2/2011
So the word 'awesomeness' comes to mind right now, pure awesomeness.
Great job on the story, though a little predictable at times, it was overall an unique plot line and characters.
Happy Writing, dearest author
. xx .
| SweetSarah2 chapter 22 . 5/30/2011
I LOVED IT!
This was an amazing story, even when Wonton annoyed me with his pig-headed male stubbornness he amazed me with his love and passion. I think you portrayed these characters perfectly and I wouldn't say to change anything.
The little poem at the end wrapped the story up and I thought it was quite cute. XD
And I might buy your book...if I can figure out how to use . [grins]
Anyways, loved this you are a fantastic writer. XD
Keep on writing.
| Casefile chapter 22 . 5/30/2011
Really great story! Hope you can write something more with a werewolf-theme.
| SweetSarah2 chapter 21 . 5/26/2011
Love this story!
At first Wonton really annoyed me because I'm WAY in freedom and rights. If it had been me
I probably wouldn't have stopped screaming and fighting until I ran out of breath. But that's just me.
Anyways, I love Wonton now that she saw his side of things and he agreed to let her have some freedom.
Are you going to write an epilogue? PLEASE do. I'd love to see more of them as mates.
This was an amazing and emotional story and I absolutely love it. Even when Wonton was pissing me off. ;)
| kylen chapter 21 . 5/25/2011
Congratulations! Its all done then? I kinda hoped there would be more pizazz or comotion when Wotan came back to get Ayla but i stil enjoyed the way you wrote it. The fight with the dad? interesting... Ayla made the right choice, Wotan Ayla Love! Malisha is back and she prego! All in all its pretty sensational. Its been tied together. Except now, Ayla is gonna be all wolfy. YAYAY, sensational, brilliant job. Thank you for writing the story and keeping it going and thank you fro responding to the reviews thats always really nice and thoughtful, its makes a huge difference on whether i continue to review. Good Job, keeep on writing :))))
| Garneau chapter 21 . 5/24/2011
Sorry I hadto log out so I could review.
I really love this story and all the characters.
But there was one thig that confused me. In this chapter Malisha said once a werewolf mate with a human the human would turn in to a werewolf as well.
But Ayla's (such a pretty name) mum didn't turn into awerewolf and there was that whole thing with Scott's mother remain human until she was turned by Wotan's grandparents. Is 'mating' then different than have sex and thus children? Is it because of the whole bite/mark thing?
Anyway I look forward to the last chapter,
| RomanceObssessed chapter 20 . 5/24/2011
I wish that there wasn't so much emphasis on mates being more important than family. Also I didn't liked Wotan sometimes, he was mean and never tried to see thing through her point of view. And i think that a persons feelings shouldn't completely change once they are turned (im talking about Aylas friend, whatever happened to her by the way?) I think once they are bitten they should have some type of internal stuggle over how they feel. I hope you didnt think i was being mean in this review because that wasnt my intention, i just wanted to tell you my thoughts. Overall I liked it and will read the last chapters and other stories by you because you are a good writer.
| ImperfectlyPurrrfect chapter 1 . 5/22/2011
This looks interesting :]
How do I pronounce the names? Ay-lah? & Woah-tan?
| Soren the Maniacal Dragon chapter 18 . 5/20/2011
Yaaaay! Finally! I'm so happy I could cry -
| LeaveThePieces chapter 18 . 5/20/2011
Right... Well I agree when you say it was an error in judgement. If you don't mean it, don't put it up.
I do sorta apologize because I was already in a bad mood and you may have gotten the brunt of it. But yeah... NOT the best idea.
Anyways... What I meant is that currently werewolves and vampires are a bit overdone. I wouldn't say this is unoriginal, but there are so many werewolf stories right now. You've put a... different spin on it though so it's alright.
| clairey chapter 1 . 5/20/2011
I really liked this story..but the ending? Please tell me this leads to a sequel? It has to..you cant just leave it there!
| LeaveThePieces chapter 17 . 5/19/2011
I'm not trying to be harsh or rude or anything because really this is your story, but really?
When I took creative writing my teacher told the class that we couldn't end stories like... this. Where you have all of the buildup for the readers and then you just... destroy it.
You had a great story going... It was cute, and although a bit overdone as of late, the plot was good. I really dislike fantasy stories and yet I was reading this one.
Yeah, I'm a bit mad. And really, even if you decided to change it I'm not sure I would read it. That's not me trying to be a *** or anything, but you kind of ruined it for me. You could've had a really great, popular story and that's how you decided to end it? You're just cheating yourself as an author.
Maybe you were just trying to find a way to end it, I really don't know. But it does stink for me to have all that romance build up and then just end it.