Reviews for Our Business Deal
Creativeswan chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
Wow It doesn't have very good flow like you mentioned, but I loved the creative plot. Especially the last two sentences, so simple yet so powerful when you think about it. You just earned yourself a fan lol :')
Invisible chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
I'll keep this review short this time because I have to get back to work. But what I really like about this is how you give the idea of love and hate and really show the relationship between them. In order to show that you love someone, you must show that you can hate them; and in order to have someone, you must have, at some point, loved them. That idea is something that people pretend to understand but aren't really able to show it and you showed that relationship well in this poem. There is also the idea of a business deal. The love is only good as long as it's needed and when it's not, it needs to be thrown away. But at the same time, it can never be truly be clean. In the words of 'The Script,' "When the heart breaks, it don't break even."