Reviews for Missing Pieces
Ingrid Indigo chapter 10 . 10/31/2010
Kyaa~ I've been reading silently for too long!

I hope she forgets what happened later and things are really awkward (or/and he takes advantage of her!)! The kiss was a bit sudden, no warning, and what about Dean? Jesse punched him and that's it? No getting trampled by the sea of people? No crying like a little schoolgirl with lipgloss on? Hahaha! I must say, I think they fell in love a little too quickly, but you put in just the right amount of detail to keep me hooked long enough to be wanting more! :D

Keep writing you rock, P.S. I think you should include Devon in the next chapter, just sayin'.
AlreadyGone chapter 10 . 10/31/2010
Well, it's about time. I feel bad though because she is drunk but he's totally going to actually ask her out, right?

Then it's all better.

Great job and I can't wait for the next update!

~HAPPY HALLOWEEN!~
shanaenae123 chapter 10 . 10/31/2010
finally ! they finally kiss! ooh! and i don't like this chapter... I LOVE IT!
buterfly893 chapter 10 . 10/30/2010
A! YOU USED PART OF MY SUGGESTION! A! THATS AWESOME! PLEASE WRITE MORE AND THANKS FOR USING PART OF MINE!
love bella chapter 9 . 10/28/2010
i like it! but sometimes it gets a little hurried and the grammar/tense is wrong. at times i don't understand what's happening at all. but the plot's interesting and i like the twist & turns.

however, in chapter 9, i think it was kind of random that dean just decided to ask sam out. (:

so yeah. i think jesse should go to the mall after dean and there should be some kind of fight. lol.
XxPinkxXxCherriesxX chapter 9 . 10/27/2010
Oh...getting juicy! What's Jesse gunna do?

Can't wait for the next chap!
Music Read Luv chapter 9 . 10/24/2010
hm...I LOVE THE STORY! D (if you ask the author, lightprevails(thats her username on fiction press. look her up! she writes some pretty good stories.), she knows that i give a lot of good reviews and advice...) UPDATE SOON! oh! and btw, idea to ask sam out in the story? note, rooftop, rose. D
butterfly893 chapter 9 . 10/24/2010
that was AWESOME! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE AND HERE IS MY IDEA: ok so jesse could run into sam and dean at the party and then get really mad but not know why and ask to talk to sam and then she says yes so they go outside and he starts yelling at her cuz she is out with dean and then she could get angry and say why do you care wat i do and then he could accidentaly slip and say cuz i like you and then she gould gasp or somthing like that and then he could kiss her and then she kisses back and then she realizes that she is kissing him and backs away and he could like look sad or somthing cuz she backed away and then she would run all the way back to thier apartment and then once she is back on their porch she sees devon waiting for her and gets really scared and then he could like hurt her or somthing while back at the party jesse gets a bad feeling and goes to find sam and when he finds her she is lying on the grownd in the middle of the street and you could just go on from there but you could add details but this is just an idea and this idea isent done but you could use it if you wanted to and great story :-)
AlreadyGone chapter 9 . 10/23/2010
Still cute. It's nice how she doesn't take his call because, after all, she did just spill most of her cuts out to him. Maybe that needs a little rewording, haha(: Told her life story perhaps? That sounds less graphic.

I'm afraid, however, because I don't want anything bad to happen to her! But Jesse is going to go so he'll be watching out for her. He's probably having a spazz attack because she didn't answer. Huh.

Nice dresses too, the green definately matches your character picture too, so that's really nice.

And about how to ask her out? I'm not too sure about that one, really. Hm...

Maybe...OH! So, this technically might not be all-original, but I kind of like the idea. So, they go to the party or whatever but it's slightly chilly so he gives her his jacket because she shivers but then, either Hayliee or someone can see that and be all, "Omigod, are you guys here together!" and then Jesse can be all, "Yeah," because he is all awesome then the person can freak out but leave them alone with a dumbfounded Sam who can be all, "Why did you say that?" and Jesse can reply, "I'm sorry, I shouldn't have said that. But, would you like to be my date to this lovely affair and perhaps even go out with me or even be my girlfriend?" and he says it all fancy-like. Yup. That's basically my idea. It seems I'm liking this story more every time you update and look forward to reading this. Honestly, I got the email for this after another update but I just wanted to read this one so badly that I couldn't help myself. No bid deal. You're just that awesome.

One thing: You might want to mention who is on the phone at the beginning there. Somehow, I feel like you mentioned it because of the way it was worded or something but it might not be clear for other people. Now, I'm pretty sure I just forgot, but I can't remember the significance of this Matt fellow. Curious.

Well, lovely job and I can't wait for an update. I apologize for any spelling errors in the review but I can't actually see what I'm typing as I'm typing it so...XD

Update soon please and loverly job!
TaylorRenae chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
Wonderful!

I love the spunk.
AlreadyGone chapter 8 . 10/16/2010
Very nice, but where did the kitty go? (:

I can tell this is going to be a huge mess and really, really intense at times. It's nice to see Jesse admitting his feelings to himself...or at least trying not to. Same with Sam.

So, they both have crazy ex's, right? Or at least in the broad sense(: Devon and Brittany should get together. That way they would leave everybody alone and have some arm candy, haha(:

I really loved the little bit at the end before she explains everything. The bit where she explains his smell and how she is feeling is so nicely done. I love how she uses the 'We were having a moment.' It not only describes it perfectly but it shows that she fully acknowledges it.

I think there needs to be something in the next chapter where he confessed what happens to him and they find mutual understanding and something epic happens. Great job and this chapter was so great, even if it wasn't as happy as the rest(:

Update soon!
shanaenae123 chapter 8 . 10/16/2010
omigawsh! you should update really soon! i love this chapter.
XxPinkxXxCherriesxX chapter 8 . 10/15/2010
I TOTALLY LURRVED IT!

XD

AWESOMENES!

UPDATE SOON OR I MIGHT DIE!
Alissa chapter 8 . 10/15/2010
wow, um i thought the chapter was good but your rabid cat threat kinda scared me.
Pepperx chapter 7 . 10/12/2010
i want those boxers :L

its was well written dw and i'm looking forward to the next chapter :) x
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