Reviews for Missing Pieces
XxPinkxXxCherriesxX chapter 7 . 10/11/2010
Awesome! Update soon!
AlreadyGone chapter 7 . 10/10/2010
Hi. I read your story.

(: Hehe

This is really good and I like how it's going along. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed but I've needed some motivation. This chapter was extremely amusing and I'm curious...



Update soon!
shanaenae123 chapter 7 . 10/10/2010
since you won't tell who dev- devon is ... you shall update really soon! i'm curious and me plus curiousity is baad.. :)
shanaenae123 chapter 6 . 10/4/2010
i read the first chapter and i can honestly say i like it more than the first one! :D and i lurve this chapter
Steinwolf chapter 2 . 9/27/2010
Nice story so far.

I wish you could style your paragraphs better though - it was a real pain reading chapter 1 & 2 to be perfectly honest, puts the odd strain on the eyes.

Also, it would be a good idea to describe a bit more, sometimes the story goes quite fast, leaving small gaps which make the reader(as far as I'm concerned) slightly confused.

Otherwise, the story is good, the characters are alive and interesting and by the end of every chapter, the reader is left with a need for more - which speaks good for the writer of any work.

Anyway - hope I helped with my reviewing.


shanaenae123 chapter 5 . 9/26/2010
i like jesse's side! hehehehe
shanaenae123 chapter 4 . 9/20/2010
i like this chapter too! hahahaha and i agree man whore is a fun word to say! ans i'm looking forward to sam's "bad days" :D
Amaeveing chapter 1 . 9/19/2010
I really luv da way u write
zero434 chapter 3 . 9/19/2010
wah this is awesome! i dont have an account at fp yet so im anonymous but i just have to tell u this is awesome!
shanaenae123 chapter 3 . 9/15/2010
i really like this chapter! it's funny! and cute and jesse has a lip ring!
Rae Kitano chapter 3 . 9/14/2010
LOL Poor Sam. What a day.

Looking forward to what transpires between Sam and Jesse, he seems so cute ;)

My-Bloody-Sacrifice96 chapter 1 . 9/14/2010
I love this. your a great writer and you use great descriptive words, :). The character "Jesse" is probably one of the best characters i've heard of in a while. "'You don't want to have a class with me? That hurts, sweetheart. And to think I really liked you!'"

aha. i loved that.:) good job!:)
shanaenae123 chapter 2 . 9/10/2010
i really like this story! and your a good writer :D can't wait for the next chapter :D
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 2 . 9/10/2010
Dude, I started reading your story because it was in the recently updated, and for some reason I was sure that it only had one chapter...and thats when I get EPIC deja vu, and I jump to the suspicion that you're an evil plagiarist, so I have an urge to stab you in the eye. Sorry about that.

OMG! It's another Sam character! It's the second one I've read today...and my names Sam! How exciting (I'm being serious too, this is all the excitement I get)

I like him, he kind of reminds me of one of my characters, but funnier. UPDATE!
Rae Kitano chapter 2 . 9/9/2010
Well done. Your second chapter is a big improvement on your first.

Would like to know more about you characters so I guess that means I need you to post more chapter soon ;)

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