Reviews for Safari Haiku
Mrs P chapter 1 . 10/31/2011
All good. Lioness particularly, as you describe such a peaceful scene which I assume is about to change drastically. You capture a snapshot of each animal well. I think the commas in the cheetah one adds to the feeling of the impatience and the movement of the , nice work :-)

Mrs P:-)
Crystal Cavalier chapter 1 . 12/6/2010
Very nice, I like 'Lioness' and 'Crocodile' ) perhaps 'Cheetah' could be laid out differently? You could try using a new line instead of commas ('sprint, fly, chase, bursting') as it seems a little... bunched together maybe? The words are lovely, I'm just wondering if the spacing might help it flow a little better? Ignore me if you want to P

Anyway, great work

xx
lymli chapter 2 . 12/2/2010
I like the four
Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu chapter 1 . 11/21/2010
Well, this is actually a good work focusing on the wildlife of Africa. You've managed to capture the defining traits of the respective animals spot on with the added imagery to heighten the impact of your words. :) All in all a good job done. Sorry if this review is short. I don't have a way in writing extensive reviews for poetry. That plus I'm having a bad case of running nose now. x.x
nickyO chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
a strong set of vibrant poems. Crocodile is my fav.