Reviews for a decade without remorse
LeFlamel chapter 1 . 2/17/2011
first let me just say that poetry isn't really my strongest suit. regardless, you opened well (except i didn't get the worldspun thing) with the description and detail. starting with "lips tangled" u did well with the word construction and choice, painting a nice image. then there's the transition to speaking of the fire, nice symbolism there. the themes (im assuming) of deception/creating lies and trusting is interesting, and the emotion near the conclusion is great. Personally, i was put off initially by the crassness of the "absence of fucking" line, but upon reading it again it's actually kinda funny and a nice touch to an otherwise beautifully poetic ending